tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post2553302437919401899..comments2023-12-28T13:11:06.666+00:00Comments on Pics and Poems: The White CrucifixionDave Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-68757216363300419032009-05-15T17:07:00.000+01:002009-05-15T17:07:00.000+01:00Very good. "whirlpool world of hate" - I like tha...Very good. "whirlpool world of hate" - I like that. Endings are difficult; you nailed this one.Dulukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02480650545522930136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-4798922333052211932009-04-29T16:24:00.000+01:002009-04-29T16:24:00.000+01:00PS - I will have to look up the meaning of "anisop...PS - I will have to look up the meaning of "anisoptera"!Lynda Lehmannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10914824862008453219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-82506448441158742282009-04-29T16:23:00.000+01:002009-04-29T16:23:00.000+01:00Extremely powerful statement, Dave, made of many w...Extremely powerful statement, Dave, made of many well-turned phrases and well-placed repetition. <br /><br />This poems speaks of a wider perspective on religion, war and the human condition than some readers may be comfortable with.<br /><br />To me, a work such as this is heroic, for confronting the demons of "the mighty mechanism, man."Lynda Lehmannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10914824862008453219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-14346228304486191722009-04-27T14:20:00.000+01:002009-04-27T14:20:00.000+01:00PatriceI very much appreciate your comment and tha...<B>Patrice</B>I very much appreciate your comment and thank you for it.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-41586098829648858802009-04-26T15:26:00.000+01:002009-04-26T15:26:00.000+01:00Even a non-religious person like my self can feel ...Even a non-religious person like my self can feel tempestuous and heightened emotion and angst reading this.<br /> <br />Very powerful poem, Dave. It really works well with the painting.Patricehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10722805078667526468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-48058656749450629762009-04-25T11:34:00.000+01:002009-04-25T11:34:00.000+01:00CondaCome as late as you like, as long as you come...<B>Conda</B>Come as late as you like, as long as you come! Seriously, though, thanks for that comment. I actually started with the painting. The poem was intended as a commentary on it. I realised afterwards what I should have realised earlier, that that needed to have been spelled out, as it is germane to some of the thoughts.<br /><br /><B>Lucas</B>Many thanks for the feedback. Your comments are much appreciated.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-30170648237638578652009-04-25T00:38:00.000+01:002009-04-25T00:38:00.000+01:00The stanza that ends "around him pinks the mighty ...The stanza that ends "around him pinks the mighty mechanism man" really affected me. There are deep themes running throughout the poem and all them connect with Jesus Chagal and the twentieth century debacle. The rhythm and meter you have chosen is a tricky one to maintain. You have handled it well. Very good poem, Dave!Lucashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07642126053527835870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-23862423395020848802009-04-24T23:48:00.000+01:002009-04-24T23:48:00.000+01:00Yes, I'm coming late to the comments, but wanted t...Yes, I'm coming late to the comments, but wanted to say I love your use of the language in this poem, Dave. Especially "God-like anisoptera" and "Doubly-jilted Jewish god". <br /><br />Plus, illustration by Chagall, excellent, fits just right.Conda Douglashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12972790965426924941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-77867012908531657152009-04-24T11:41:00.000+01:002009-04-24T11:41:00.000+01:00A Cuban in London I love and very much appreciate...<B>A Cuban in London </B>I love and very much appreciate your first paragraph. Worthy of being in a poem itself. Come to think of it, I could say the same for the other paragraph. Much thanks.<br /><br /><B>Leatherdykeuk </B>No without some misgivings, I might say.<br /><br /><B>Aniket </B>Useful comment, much appreciated.<br /><br /><B>SweetTalkingGuy </B>Actually, I keep reading it, just to make sure I've got it as I meant it!<br /><br /><B>Stephen </B>Wow, I have just begun to think about a post on Leonard Cohen, so you may guess what a compliment that is! As for poet Laureate, almost you persuade me to apply for my sac! Thanks.<br /><br /><B>Watermaid </B>yes, Chagall being Jewish is where it all begins. He insists on the Crucified Christ as being a crucified Jew. Thanks for your response.<br /><br /><B>Derrick </B>Thanks for commenting, it does help greatly.<br /><br /><B>Willow </B>Such a generous comment, I am overwhelmed. Thanks.<br /><br /><B>Artist Unplugged </B>Thanks.<br /><br /><B>Carole </B>I quite understand your consternation. I have been to your excellent post and agree with C.S. Lewis's assessment and his reasons for thinking that Jesus must be who he said He was, which I would argue is precisely what Chagall is saying. He is who he said he was and part of that is Jewish. That is the part that western iconography ignores or disputes. My comments relate, of course, to the picture and not to any scriptural teaching.<br /><br /><B>Art </B>I confess that I have not read the novel, but I am obviously going to have to, thanks for the info relating to it. I have added it to my ever-growing list of books to beg, borrow or steal.<br /><br /><B>Fantastic Forrest </B>I decided that it might be fun to do a series of poems on great works of art. I chose The White Crucifixion as my first one. It is a painting about which I had (and have) some unresolved issues, but which I admire intensely. Thank you for your greatly appreiated comment.<br /><br /><B>Cathy </B>Guess that settles it. Yup, I <B>have</B> to read it! Thanks.<br /><br /><B>Starlene </B>That is a much appreciated and fantastic comment. Thank you for it.<br /><br /><B>Pamela Terry and Edward </B>Indeed!<br /><br /><B>The Things We Carried </B>Welcome. That is a very generous comment. Thank you for it.<br /><br /><B>Cecil/DreamCreateRepeat </B>I am absolutely certain of that. no doubts at all.<br /><br /><B>Ronda </B>Thank you so much for that. Such encouragement is always welcome.<br /><br /><B>John </B>I am almost sure it is the first poem I have written that has a refrain. I can't think of another, though it hadn't occurred to me until I read your comment. Interesting... thanks for that.<br /><br /><B>Madame de Farge </B>My appreciation for such a positive response. Very welcome.<br /><br /><B>Dick </B>Yes, I must admit that I do not often use Trochaic rhythm. Perhaps I should experiment more... Thanks once more.<br /><br /><B>Minny Blue </B>WelcomeI like the reference to a bell tolling. It is apt, but was not intended. Thanks for an interesting response<br /><br /><B>Adrian </B>Don't know how to respond to that! but thanks.<br /><br /><B>Lady in Red </B>Many thanks and mine to you.<br /><br /><B>Cloudia </B>Lovely comment. thanks.<br /><br /><B>Sudharm </B>An interesting comment. Something to think about. Thanks.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-72611483562603101012009-04-24T06:41:00.000+01:002009-04-24T06:41:00.000+01:00You have put a lot into this Dave, so beautifully ...You have put a lot into this Dave, so beautifully crafted. <br />The best thing was the invisible rhyming which i admire immensely, where the words actually don't rhyme but the thoughts, the ideas do.<br /><br />You are a master at that Dave!!sudharm baxihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05267161615281216261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-71033192976477931312009-04-24T06:20:00.000+01:002009-04-24T06:20:00.000+01:00Brilliant!!
Aloha Poet DaveBrilliant!!<br />Aloha Poet DaveCloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-12419161134147475942009-04-24T02:54:00.000+01:002009-04-24T02:54:00.000+01:00wow, Dave, incredible, I will read again and again...wow, Dave, incredible, I will read again and again loudly.<br />Best wishes,<br />RosanaThe lady in Redhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17760688385414194057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-7671806072399784992009-04-24T02:34:00.000+01:002009-04-24T02:34:00.000+01:00Awesome Dave!Awesome Dave!LR Photographyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01634383283728817474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-32278372638773785742009-04-23T23:47:00.000+01:002009-04-23T23:47:00.000+01:00There seems to be a bell tolling all the way throu...There seems to be a bell tolling all the way through this inspired poem. Whatever happens, whatever the truth, little Jewish son of God stands in the middle, as the mighty mechanism marches on. <br />This poem is a gift! Thank you...Minny Bluehttp://minblu.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-18644278612470264152009-04-23T22:26:00.000+01:002009-04-23T22:26:00.000+01:00There's a wonderfully incantatory feel to this, Da...There's a wonderfully incantatory feel to this, Dave. It demands to be read out loud. A powerful and effective use of trochaic rhythms - unusual in contemporary verse.Dickhttp://patteran.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-997555506540063172009-04-23T22:17:00.000+01:002009-04-23T22:17:00.000+01:00Wow. I will have to read this several times. Very ...Wow. I will have to read this several times. Very powerful indeed. It's just great.Madame DeFargehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08172239340844485940noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-55507975515476006222009-04-23T21:47:00.000+01:002009-04-23T21:47:00.000+01:00Excellent poem-- love the morphing refrain-- I ten...Excellent poem-- love the morphing refrain-- I tend to like that in general, but this is a really good example of the technique. The painting by Chagall looks like it's wonderful-- love his work.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15687192784861682991noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-57449137098872462262009-04-23T20:43:00.000+01:002009-04-23T20:43:00.000+01:00Provocative. Evocative. Stirs the heart of my divi...Provocative. Evocative. Stirs the heart of my divinity. Stirs the heart of my mechanistic DNA. Must let it steep a while and come back for another sip. Well done, my friend. Well done.Ronda Laveenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03902846545309643023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-83159485101377188982009-04-23T19:42:00.000+01:002009-04-23T19:42:00.000+01:00I think if the man Jesus could see what has happen...I think if the man Jesus could see what has happened since his time on earth, he would weep.Cecile/DreamCreateRepeathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04566188980438273712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-57285893057504463502009-04-23T18:52:00.000+01:002009-04-23T18:52:00.000+01:00Bravo!
I am so glad you joined my followers list ...Bravo!<br /><br />I am so glad you joined my followers list which led me to discover your incredible talent with words.<br /><br />I had to read this piece slowy, carefully, not wanting to miss a single morsel.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-56198419194617692332009-04-23T18:50:00.000+01:002009-04-23T18:50:00.000+01:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-57031144969377079772009-04-23T17:48:00.000+01:002009-04-23T17:48:00.000+01:00Mighty mechanism. Indeed.Mighty mechanism. Indeed.Pamela Terry and Edwardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12746603636884819522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-10378480364485974532009-04-23T16:44:00.000+01:002009-04-23T16:44:00.000+01:00Thank you Dave, for being the sort of man who shed...Thank you Dave, for being the sort of man who sheds light on things shoved into dark closets of denial. The light may sting the eyes at first, but they adjust eventually. When they do...a new perspective is born.Laura Doylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14407229726272149440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-38406737144405459652009-04-23T16:28:00.000+01:002009-04-23T16:28:00.000+01:00This poem has pulled such emotion out of me. I'l h...This poem has pulled such emotion out of me. I'l have to reread it many times to settle my mind on how I feel about it. <br />Asher Lev is a good read. My eldest and I read it together a couple of years ago. We had wonderful discussions while reading it.Cathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01947681055574897580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-14730791707767955472009-04-23T16:21:00.000+01:002009-04-23T16:21:00.000+01:00Dave,
Very gutsy poem. As you know, I love the C...Dave,<br /><br />Very gutsy poem. As you know, I love the Chagall. Was your poem inspired by it, specifically, or did you just choose it to illustrate your work?<br /><br />"...a millpond centre for a whirlpool world of hate." Yup. Way too much hate.Fantastic Forresthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08044290192610027408noreply@blogger.com