tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post6753081069296503181..comments2023-12-28T13:11:06.666+00:00Comments on Pics and Poems: Fissures are Us.Dave Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-52125473602813472222011-10-27T16:09:56.678+01:002011-10-27T16:09:56.678+01:00very deep, you have incredible imaginations.very deep, you have incredible imaginations.Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05532576755186051550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-6407166070627642082011-10-27T16:09:43.263+01:002011-10-27T16:09:43.263+01:00very deep, you have incredible imaginations.very deep, you have incredible imaginations.Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05532576755186051550noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-52897951586201153312011-10-27T15:05:07.156+01:002011-10-27T15:05:07.156+01:00Great poem ..particulay liked 'a fortress in t...Great poem ..particulay liked 'a fortress in this wilderness'.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02353700576663217563noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-26114749619682096572011-10-27T13:34:47.224+01:002011-10-27T13:34:47.224+01:00becomes the disconnect
This, for me, summed up th...becomes the disconnect<br /><br />This, for me, summed up the whole feel of the image - unreal, other worldly reflections of reflections.Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-57934442959636593082011-10-27T12:54:07.691+01:002011-10-27T12:54:07.691+01:00Isabel
No, fair comment, I think. Thanks for sayin...<b>Isabel</b><br />No, fair comment, I think. Thanks for saying.<br /><br /><b>The Weaver of Grass</b><br />Good to hear that you liked it. It is strange the transformations that overtake some people behind the wheel.<br /><br /><b>Carl</b><br />Good point. Yes, you are absolutely right.<br /><br /><b>Muhammad</b><br />Thanks again for the comments. It's really good to have them. Yes, I was thinking of the car as a sort of micra-environment insulating us from whatever might be the larger picture.<br /><br /><b>sunny</b><br />Much thanks for this. Very helpful.<br /><br /><b>Ann</b><br />A warm welcome to you and many thanks for the interesting comment. I can relate absolutely to your fears. I think we all have them for our children and grandchildren.<br /><br /><b>Helen</b><br />Really good of you to say so. Thank you.<br /><br /><b>Britania</b><br />Welcome to the blog. And thank you so much for your very kind words.<br /><br /><b>Tumblewords</b><br />Thank you for this. It's good to know how the poem seems to others.<br /><br /><b>Tommaso</b><br />Thank you. As always, a very helpful observation.<br /><br /><b>Christine</b><br />Many thanks for this. Yes, we are all learning, and yes, I think you arecorrect, that the poem could be tightened. I was rather seduced I think by the idea of multiplicity, of refections being reflected etc etc, and tried to build that into the poem. Thanks for saying what you felt.<br /><br /><b>Windsmoke</b><br />Interesting that you should choose that line... thanks.<br /><br /><b>Jeanette</b><br />Yes, you are right about the different interpretations. I started with the idea of being shut away in a sort of mobile cell, away from the world, but that opens out into all sorts of things.<br /><br /><b>JJ Roa Rodriguez</b><br />Hi and welcome to the blog. Good to have you. Yes, I see exactly how that would be.<br /><br /><b>Mary</b><br />Yes, exactly.<br /><br /><b>haricot</b><br />Good to have your visit and your comment. Thank you for your kind words.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-24591249364636886392011-10-27T09:36:25.121+01:002011-10-27T09:36:25.121+01:00Your way of descriptions of the dark side of the s...Your way of descriptions of the dark side of the society and human beings have a lot of reality.<br />I'm amazed and frightened...<br /><br />Thank you very much for visiting my blog.<br />From Japan,haricothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14052133324297115131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-62339262877574337422011-10-27T04:15:37.456+01:002011-10-27T04:15:37.456+01:00Ah yes, the car is such a claustrophobic world ind...Ah yes, the car is such a claustrophobic world indeed, now that you mention it!! People are just trapped there as they go from point A to point B!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-89291801062502207092011-10-26T22:22:39.786+01:002011-10-26T22:22:39.786+01:00this is nice... Now that I am taking my driving le...this is nice... Now that I am taking my driving lesson, yes i believe once I am inside the car, it is my protection out there. <br /><br />Nice take sir!<br /><br />JJRod'zJJ Roa Rodriguezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501127870785148555noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-23970926330263358922011-10-26T22:17:30.457+01:002011-10-26T22:17:30.457+01:00I like--artistically--all those layers upon layers...I like--artistically--all those layers upon layers of reflections and disconnect. It hit me between the eyes. Several different interpretations, which is always fun. For me it didn't speak of wealth, but our disjointed, fragmented societies and ways of life. We drive through without seeing, we drive away, we hide in our cars with our music and our cell phones and our busy minds, not seeing.<br /><br />For me, that's where it hit the core of me. And made me sigh.JeannetteLShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13528285846408727632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-47879115442861618422011-10-26T21:29:22.500+01:002011-10-26T21:29:22.500+01:00The car is a mobile fortress against the wildernes...The car is a mobile fortress against the wilderness :-).Windsmoke.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12225394580987872677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-25536200757008110782011-10-26T20:03:48.213+01:002011-10-26T20:03:48.213+01:00It takes time to find the centre of this poem, the...It takes time to find the centre of this poem, the enclosed world of the car that cuts communication between humans.It makes me think of Lawrence's world of machinery, so much against nature.I think though that the poem could be tightened... but I am still learning, too.Christinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07641794618204577036noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-91302635548944500412011-10-26T19:17:12.436+01:002011-10-26T19:17:12.436+01:00Once more, a triumph the last two lines.. concludi...Once more, a triumph the last two lines.. concluding a poem in which meaning is greatly reinforced by sound.Tommaso Gervasuttihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17137499390434949734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-45593200472764669272011-10-26T18:40:51.122+01:002011-10-26T18:40:51.122+01:00The reflection of reflections. This feels very lik...The reflection of reflections. This feels very like the world - fragmented mirrors, reflections unjoined. Love the multi-layers.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-60528549239907850072011-10-26T18:04:26.414+01:002011-10-26T18:04:26.414+01:00wow! absolutely breathtaking.
"Reflections...wow! absolutely breathtaking. <br /><br />"Reflections of reflections,<br />reflections laid upon reflections.<br />Glass shines like steel<br />and slices steel, while slivers<br />of that steel slide back and forth<br />dissecting glass. Dissection<br />overtakes the world."<br /><br />this part made me stop reading, and re-read from the start. so much depth in your work. congratulations!Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08659129451532947444noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-21883188860109237472011-10-26T16:15:20.655+01:002011-10-26T16:15:20.655+01:00... dissection overtakes the world! How appropria...... dissection overtakes the world! How appropriate. You have a magic way of getting to the heart of the matter.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-79505648466674622492011-10-26T15:24:30.476+01:002011-10-26T15:24:30.476+01:00Dissection
overtakes the world.
Man
caught in the ...Dissection<br />overtakes the world.<br />Man<br />caught in the reflections' crossfire<br />stands no chance.<br /><br />We feel the truth of this more every day. Disheartening. You have chosen a perfect metaphor for our condition.I find myself looking back, constantly comparing what used-to-be with today, fearing the world my grandchildren will inherit.Ann Grenierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13501522748426995035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-56086796944667835502011-10-26T14:48:54.459+01:002011-10-26T14:48:54.459+01:00Hi Mr dave,your writing style is very different an...Hi Mr dave,your writing style is very different and easy to understand.sunnyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17194522376789894727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-91974044362200314892011-10-26T12:41:17.387+01:002011-10-26T12:41:17.387+01:00well i guess what i understand by this is that the...well i guess what i understand by this is that the car is symbolic for the rich and money and with it people tend to distance themselves from the rest of us... marvelous as usual you are ;)Misterio Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04396947981573285341noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-84023809476672027362011-10-26T12:39:25.464+01:002011-10-26T12:39:25.464+01:00Yes. The car has taken us from our environment. ...Yes. The car has taken us from our environment. We drive past the neighbors house instead of stopping in to check on them. We are anonymous in our cars. It is another way technology has impacted ( and not for the better) society.Carlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09751363280115223716noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-42524424775099213382011-10-26T10:59:15.897+01:002011-10-26T10:59:15.897+01:00I agree that once we are inside the car we become ...I agree that once we are inside the car we become totally protected by it and see the world in a different way. I liked this poem Dave.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-43984692375302951022011-10-26T10:35:06.728+01:002011-10-26T10:35:06.728+01:00I like your shards and the ice city but I feel the...I like your shards and the ice city but I feel the heart of the poem is buried in a few too many layers of splintering/reflecting. But then again I might simply be too literal-minded.<br /><br />Isabel xIsabel Doylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17974989548030799086noreply@blogger.com