tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post8949365339116354788..comments2023-12-28T13:11:06.666+00:00Comments on Pics and Poems: Jack and JakeDave Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comBlogger31125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-68796803714246629742009-03-17T10:19:00.000+00:002009-03-17T10:19:00.000+00:00A good short story. I loved the way you described ...A good short story. I loved the way you described the main character in the first paragraph. Loved the build up towards the denouement. Look forward to more.<BR/><BR/>Greetings from London.A Cuban In Londonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16423293358605007539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-3070620706148290522009-03-16T15:41:00.000+00:002009-03-16T15:41:00.000+00:00Oh wow Dave, this is fantastic! I am not one who ...Oh wow Dave, this is fantastic! I am not one who generally is drawn into stories about war but this is really a story about men who happened to be in a war. You have built up the suspense so well and nailed down the scene and characters to a T. I want to know what happened to make Jack react in such a way. This is an excellent story!CSD Faux Finishinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05947691876538206892noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-41803946620612355342009-03-15T23:40:00.000+00:002009-03-15T23:40:00.000+00:00Dave, you drew me in ...I really enjoyed this! I ...Dave, you drew me in ...I really enjoyed this! I wanted to know about these guys.. I wanted to keep reading... You are Good!!! Thanks!!!Gwen Buchananhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13410235558740636534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-17988208466652811132009-03-15T20:33:00.000+00:002009-03-15T20:33:00.000+00:00Fascinating! An enjoyable - if somewhat dark - rea...Fascinating! An enjoyable - if somewhat dark - read.<BR/><BR/>I should be writing right now, not reading... :)Rachel Cotterillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08969719330048416996noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-56683150767825383392009-03-15T19:28:00.000+00:002009-03-15T19:28:00.000+00:00AdrianMany thanks<B>Adrian</B><BR/>Many thanksDave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-16853847093377573672009-03-15T17:50:00.000+00:002009-03-15T17:50:00.000+00:00Dave,Thanks for giving it a think moment.Dave,<BR/><BR/>Thanks for giving it a think moment.Rosaria Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03133147851332084180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-75612887484750828652009-03-15T15:22:00.000+00:002009-03-15T15:22:00.000+00:00Fantastic story Dave, congratulations!Fantastic story Dave, congratulations!LR Photographyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01634383283728817474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-85496507801280078032009-03-15T10:28:00.000+00:002009-03-15T10:28:00.000+00:00Janie Much thanks for that.LakeViewer I will do my...<B>Janie </B><BR/>Much thanks for that.<BR/><BR/><B>LakeViewer </B><BR/>I will do my best. Am now off for a think!Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-69414703766221530022009-03-15T06:35:00.000+00:002009-03-15T06:35:00.000+00:00David King,I need your fine mind this morning. On...David King,<BR/><BR/>I need your fine mind this morning. On my post regarding rules I commented that we need a special award for people who show good breeding, promote civilized behavior and are an examplar for their part of the world. I can play with the words portion, the ditty part; but, I need help with the graphics, the picture that represents the intention of the award.<BR/><BR/>I thought that you'd be the best one to consult with. Please, please think about it and get back to me with suggestions. Thank you in advance for the time and energy that you will invest in this pursuit.Rosaria Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03133147851332084180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-40847260139728119922009-03-15T03:04:00.000+00:002009-03-15T03:04:00.000+00:00Love the story! Thanks for following, I'll be bac...Love the story! Thanks for following, I'll be back!That Janie Girlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17447630124016303483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-76500132743304299322009-03-14T14:20:00.000+00:002009-03-14T14:20:00.000+00:00Delphine Hi! and welcome. Nothing straining at the...<B>Delphine </B><BR/>Hi! and welcome. Nothing straining at the leash just now, I'm afraid. Thanks for visiting and for the comment.<BR/><BR/><B>The Clever Pup</B><BR/>Welcome to my blog and many thanks for the feedback. I much enjoyed my visit to you.<BR/><BR/><B>Lisa</B><BR/>Welcome and thanks for the interest shown to date. Great to have you aboard.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-14946994764543475182009-03-14T14:03:00.000+00:002009-03-14T14:03:00.000+00:00Hi Dave-I have been reading your blog for a while ...Hi Dave-I have been reading your blog for a while now and have decided to show my face and follow along.<BR/>I loved your short story.<BR/>Lisa xAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15047696858755347818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-32081308757803219982009-03-14T12:24:00.000+00:002009-03-14T12:24:00.000+00:00Most excellent story. My parents were adolescents ...Most excellent story. My parents were adolescents in Kent during the war. <BR/><BR/>Thanks for visiting my site. Your kind words have buoyed me for the day.The Clever Puphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07198739825136188378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-30286681005811097052009-03-14T10:15:00.000+00:002009-03-14T10:15:00.000+00:00well ! fascinating writing, cannot believe you don...well ! fascinating writing, cannot believe you don't have another story bursting to get out!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-81207798316236146882009-03-14T09:44:00.000+00:002009-03-14T09:44:00.000+00:00Midlife, menopause, mistakes and random stuff I as...<B>Midlife, menopause, mistakes and random stuff </B><BR/>I assume it was the bit about me being interesting that was the subject of your kidding!<BR/>The weekend's going very well so far. Thanks for all that and many blessings to you.<BR/><BR/><B>Annie </B><BR/>My thanks for your visit and the comment. Always welcome.<BR/><BR/><B>Patrice </B><BR/>Thanks for that. Much appreciated.<BR/><BR/><B>Weaver of Grass </B><BR/>Good of you to say so. Thanks for that.<BR/><BR/><B>Stephen </B><BR/>My thanks for the compliment. I might try my hand again, you never can tell!<BR/><BR/><B>Linda Sue</B><BR/>Many thanks - hope you didn't read it three times because you couldn't understand it, though!<BR/><BR/><B>Derrick </B><BR/>Thanks for the encouragement.<BR/><BR/><B>Helen<BR/>Very n ice of you to offer that comment. Much appreciated. </B><BR/><BR/><B>Snowbrush </B><BR/>Welcome and many thanks.<BR/><BR/><B>Cecil Dream Create Repeat </B><BR/>Thanks for the useful response.<BR/><BR/><B>Lucas </B><BR/>As always, a useful comment. Thanks.<BR/><BR/><B>Natalie </B><BR/>And thanks for the response.<BR/><BR/><B>Jeanne </B><BR/>Point taken, thanks for making it - and for the other comments also.<BR/><BR/><B>Clay </B><BR/>Interesting feedback. Thanks very much.<BR/><BR/><B>Cloudia </B><BR/>Appreciate that.<BR/><BR/><B>LakeViewer </B><BR/>The only reason I don't share more is that I don't have any more. That was my first ever. Who knows if there'll be more water in the well? I do feel encouraged enough to go have a look, though: everyone has been so kind.<BR/><BR/>I think your guru is probably correct. I didn't mean to suggest that it was the firewall; I think it was the browser that was infected.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-79072358812264143232009-03-14T08:23:00.000+00:002009-03-14T08:23:00.000+00:00Dave,Everyone pretty much said everything I would ...Dave,<BR/>Everyone pretty much said everything I would come up with, except this: You really ought to share more of these stories. Except for the work of Hemingway and Dos Passos, wars are skirted over, too hot to handle for most current writers. Maybe the boys and girls from Iraq will begin to see these stories of yours and open up. We ought to create websites for them to get help opening up, retelling their personal narratives.<BR/><BR/>I missed your last post because my computer was causing me similar problems. You say it is because of the firewalls? My computer guru thinks it is the gunk/ imagery accumulating after we visit all the other places, our browsing history. He ran a diagnostic through Mcafee, and cleaned up quite a bit. But, now, I'm adding more gunk.Rosaria Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03133147851332084180noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-76390201835818350602009-03-14T05:14:00.000+00:002009-03-14T05:14:00.000+00:00Talent at play.Marvelous, Dave.Aloha-Talent at play.<BR/>Marvelous, Dave.<BR/>Aloha-Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-88986827382005206762009-03-14T05:03:00.000+00:002009-03-14T05:03:00.000+00:00"There's only one possibility if they met at Dunki..."There's only one possibility if they met at Dunkirk, said Joe, coming out of concealment: they met on the bloody beach!<BR/><BR/>That it? asked Frank, but Jack had clammed up. It was quite clear he had said more than he had ever meant to, and he was saying no more."--ha! Brilliant Dave--this part sticks out for me--splendid piece sir.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-29485963151481331932009-03-14T02:41:00.000+00:002009-03-14T02:41:00.000+00:00Strong dialogue, suspense builds nicely and very g...Strong dialogue, suspense builds nicely and very good character arc for Jake.<BR/><BR/>I understand (I think) what you're doing with Jack and Jake that makes naming them so similarly valuable, but it also made keeping which one is which straight in my head difficult. <BR/><BR/>Excellent story!Jeanne Estridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13096521122802823385noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-22941820194961192782009-03-13T22:53:00.000+00:002009-03-13T22:53:00.000+00:00I LOVED this story! Thanks,Dave.I LOVED this story! Thanks,Dave.Nataliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12919764140075852854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-83173301419555763072009-03-13T22:40:00.000+00:002009-03-13T22:40:00.000+00:00Excellent story - the thread of the outsider takin...Excellent story - the thread of the outsider taking us through a really strange narrative: nail biting right to the end. I like the dialogue - brings out the characters in just a few takes.Lucashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07642126053527835870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-67598101127101785492009-03-13T20:31:00.000+00:002009-03-13T20:31:00.000+00:00I love short stories! The quick character develop...I love short stories! The quick character development, broad brush strokes and clever twists. This was a fun read: the further in I read, the more I was pulled to get to the revelation. Well done!Cecile/DreamCreateRepeathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04566188980438273712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-3527188804334949742009-03-13T20:27:00.000+00:002009-03-13T20:27:00.000+00:00It was a wonderful story.It was a wonderful story.Snowbrushhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00436087215476479042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-15157739956994546962009-03-13T17:31:00.000+00:002009-03-13T17:31:00.000+00:00Please, keep your work coming ... I so enjoy it.Please, keep your work coming ... I so enjoy it.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-81106707503102109122009-03-13T16:49:00.000+00:002009-03-13T16:49:00.000+00:00Hi Dave,I was intrigued to the end!Hi Dave,<BR/><BR/>I was intrigued to the end!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00861397533660827678noreply@blogger.com