The concept of words shaping their space is very true, when it works it's wonderful, when not, frustatingly disappointing. Your words certainly worked here.
A sculptor toils to shape the stone or mould the pliant clay. I love the rhythm in these two lines - makes me want to write something to repest it...Tempting to steal them from you...
I like this very much and I can relate strongly to it even though I tend to compare writing prose to working with clay rather than poems; my poems never require too much work, just a little structuring usually. What about 'sculpturesque' rather than 'sculptural' by the way? It suggests 'statuesque'.
What great insightful understanding Dave !! The clay has a rhythm to it and in particular the pot formed on the wheel. Just as verse needs a rhythm and balance to make it's mark and become memorable. Great!
There are lots of layers to this wonderful poem you have written. it creates such a picture, a work of art...
As I am a big fan of words, I like so much your idea of how a word can fill the space and shapes the space around... beautiful, creative and insightful!
120 Socks Thanks for saying so, but I do relate to your mention of the frustration when it doesn't work.
Isabel Yes, great image.
Jinksy Absolutely, Jinksy, if only we could, what then?
TechnoBabe As I try to, certainly. Something that fascinates me is whatever they have in common.
Leatherdykeuk Thanks.
Carl Thanks Carl.
Jim Yes, I take the analogy between clay and prose on the one hand and verse and stone on the other. Not only in the making, though, in the end product, too, I think the comparison applies. I'm not sure about statuesque, still thinking about it. To me it suggests "like" rather than "of".
Gerry Great comment. Thanks for it. You have taken the analogy a step or two further.
anthonynorth Thanks, very encouraging.
Gwei Good to have your response. Thanks.
angryparsnip It is amazing how much!
Crafty Green Poet Thanks for the interest.
Lolamouse That's very generous of you. Thanks for it.
Windsmoke Indeed. Two manifestations of the same impulse.
girl dreaming Hi and a warm welcome to my blog. Thank you so much for your supportive and interesting comment. I do hope you will come again.
The concept of words shaping their space is very true, when it works it's wonderful, when not, frustatingly disappointing. Your words certainly worked here.
ReplyDeletevery nice = it brings to mind the scuptures trapped in marble left by Michelangelo
ReplyDeleteA sculptor toils to shape the stone
ReplyDeleteor mould the pliant clay.
I love the rhythm in these two lines - makes me want to write something to repest it...Tempting to steal them from you...
Like this, perhaps?!
ReplyDeleteA sculptor toils to shape the stone
or mould the pliant clay.
If only we could fashion life
to fit, in the same way!
Indeed, Dave, artists use various tools and materials to share their talent with the rest of us. As you do with your several mediums.
ReplyDeleteHow very true this is.
ReplyDeleteNicely done. Great comparrison.
ReplyDeleteI like this very much and I can relate strongly to it even though I tend to compare writing prose to working with clay rather than poems; my poems never require too much work, just a little structuring usually. What about 'sculpturesque' rather than 'sculptural' by the way? It suggests 'statuesque'.
ReplyDeleteWhat great insightful understanding Dave !!
ReplyDeleteThe clay has a rhythm to it and in particular the pot formed on the wheel. Just as verse needs a rhythm and balance to make it's mark and become memorable.
Great!
And very well sculpted, too.
ReplyDeleteSculpted words indeed
ReplyDeleteWonderful !
ReplyDeleteSo true clay or words they both shape the world around us.
cheers, parsnip
wordshaping, yes, you're right...
ReplyDeleteSo true. Your words seem perfectly placed and make for strong poems. No structural cracks, at least not in the finished ones we see!
ReplyDeleteWriting and sculpting are one and the same :-).
ReplyDeleteThere are lots of layers to this wonderful poem you have written. it creates such a picture, a work of art...
ReplyDeleteAs I am a big fan of words, I like so much your idea of how a word can fill the space and shapes the space around... beautiful, creative and insightful!
Well said!
ReplyDeleteI like the clay/word metaphor, too.
ReplyDeleteNicely turned here, Dave.
120 Socks
ReplyDeleteThanks for saying so, but I do relate to your mention of the frustration when it doesn't work.
Isabel
Yes, great image.
Jinksy
Absolutely, Jinksy, if only we could, what then?
TechnoBabe
As I try to, certainly. Something that fascinates me is whatever they have in common.
Leatherdykeuk
Thanks.
Carl
Thanks Carl.
Jim
Yes, I take the analogy between clay and prose on the one hand and verse and stone on the other. Not only in the making, though, in the end product, too, I think the comparison applies. I'm not sure about statuesque, still thinking about it. To me it suggests "like" rather than "of".
Gerry
Great comment. Thanks for it. You have taken the analogy a step or two further.
anthonynorth
Thanks, very encouraging.
Gwei
Good to have your response. Thanks.
angryparsnip
It is amazing how much!
Crafty Green Poet
Thanks for the interest.
Lolamouse
That's very generous of you. Thanks for it.
Windsmoke
Indeed. Two manifestations of the same impulse.
girl dreaming
Hi and a warm welcome to my blog. Thank you so much for your supportive and interesting comment. I do hope you will come again.
Madeleine
Thanks.
Rachel
Many thanks for that, Rachel.