Tuesday, 28 August 2012

Life was

Light and shadows pick out planes,
layers of existence:
some we've left behind
in frock coats, crinolines
and courtly manners; some have found
eternal spring.

Perspectives can confuse:
where life and non-existence meet,
where dust motes that have been around
for aeons poke
the slumbering absences
into a semblance of new life.

For this is where our forbears spoke
of faith and all that lay before
what now are empty seams.
They saw the beauty in the snow,
tasted all the fruits of earth
and would not let the future go.
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The prompt was supplied by The Mag. The image is by Andrew Wyeth.

31 comments:

  1. While objects and furniture were left in an empty room,draped or otherwise, there were feelings of melancholy. The sense of fondness was still there playing on the minds. Nicely written Dave!

    Hank

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  2. I like your perspective of the times of our forbears...eternal spring and fruits of earth~

    The last stanza is specially lovely.

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  3. I absolutely love the style and the last stanza is sublime.

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  4. Lovely writing, Dave.
    I've often wondered about the memories retained by buildings - I'm sure some resonate more than others. One church I went into gave me the creeps and I couldn't get out fast enough. Similarly, there was a bay we moored in that felt very menacing to me (or perhaps it's simply that I don't like sailing!!)

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  5. Perspectives can confuse:
    where life and non-existence meet...great lines....and i love the last stanza and the bit about our forebearers standing in that place before the unknown....cool poem dave

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  6. Yes, wonderful poem. I actually like the beginning best - with light caught in the clothing, and also the ongoing life of dust motes! There is something wonderful about the life of all that inanimate stuff that lasts and lasts. k.

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  7. Dave - hope my comment got in there right - lovely thoughtful poem! k .

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  8. I agree with Grace. The last stanza is beautifully wrought. So much to contemplate...the place where life and non existence meet, for example.

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  9. Wonder whether our forebears saw as clearly as you say or are we seeing it through rose colored glasses as we look back.

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  10. Dave, your poetry is getting more and more magical.

    "where dust motes that have been around
    for aeons poke"

    Super lines.

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  11. Wonderful write Dave and that last stanza - superb.

    Anna :o]

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  12. Great poem, full of imagination existentialist, eternal spring, really a dream, I love it.

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  13. I often stand in places where people have stood before (as, for example, in the old lead mines - and think what memories are there in the stones, in the ground and everywhere around if only we could tap into them. Very thought-provoking Dave.

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  14. dave, you bring this room to life,
    the quietness even the delicate
    mustiness, the ideals watered here.

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  15. The last line is particularly thought provoking and interesting.

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  16. A magnificent poem, Dave.

    I also enjoyed 'Two Parts of the Road' and 'To the Manor Born.' (On my next visit to the UK I want to return to the south and Doc Martin territory.)

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  17. I love the layers of history you see in this room.

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  18. Lovely writing Dave....each stanza holds it's own true and beautiful!!

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  19. A strong metaphysical flavour here.
    Dust motes...I love breathing by them particularly when the sun fills them with its gold stings.

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  20. like the others i thought this wonderful...i so believe that stone can hold memories...xx

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  21. I especially like the forebears in frock coats and crinolines...lovely write...

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  22. absolutely lovely Dave. and the phrase:
    "where dust motes that have been around
    for aeons poke
    the slumbering absences
    into a semblance of new life."

    That made me smile!

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  23. A superfine read - I'll join the other commenters in applauding that stellar last stanza. Bravo!

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  24. Wonderful write, sir. I liked the crinolines and dust motes, the different perspectives between existence and non-existence. You went very very deeply into this room and pulled out what was hiding in the corners. Thank you.

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  25. David,
    What wonderful pace and tone. Your portrait seems so real, I felt I could reach into the frame and touch the imagery. Excellent.

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  26. Hank
    That says it, I guess: melancholy and fondness. Like that.

    Grace
    Thanks Grace. So pleased you picked that out.

    ninotaziz
    Hi, a warm welcome to you. Thank you for your visit and your kind comment.

    jabblog
    My experiences have very much paralleled yours, it seems. Good to compare notes in this way.

    Brian
    Thanks for these comments. As always, great feedback.

    Carl
    Thanks Carl.

    manicddaily
    I totally agree with your last sentence. There is something special about the inanimate that survives all else.

    Mary
    Thanks. Yes, this is a thought/feeling that I've often had in an old house.

    Tabor
    I think you have a point, but I'm not sure that the glasses are rose-tinted.

    Rachna
    Thank you so much. Any magic no doubt owes much to magical comments like this.

    hyperCRYPTICal
    So pleasing to hear you thought this. Thanks for saying.

    Leovi
    Thanks again Leovi, a really kind and helpful comment.

    The Weaver of Grass
    I know that feeling well. Imagination comes into it, I'm sure, but it's more than that. Different people often get like feelings in the same place.

    Paige + Shauna
    Hi, Good to have you visiting. You are most welcome, as is your kind - and helpful - comment.

    Jenny
    Thanks for saying so.

    Helen
    Thanks for this, much appreciated. Lovely area, the Doc Martin territory! Hope you make it and enjoy it.

    Tigerbrite
    Hi. Thanks for visiting. Really good to have your thoughts.

    Carrie Burtt
    Hi Carrie. Wonderful to have you and your feedback. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

    Tommaso
    Yes, I know what you mean. I seem to remember that as a wee kid my gran told me they were fairies!

    Kay Hi, and a warm welcome to you. Thank you so much for the comment.

    Tess
    Thanks so much - and a lovely prompt.



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  27. Kathe
    So good to have your visit and read your comments. Thank you for your kind thoughts.

    Tumblewords
    Thanks so much. Your comments really are appreciated.

    ds
    What a very thoughtful comment! Thank you for these observations. They are greatly valued.

    Steve
    Hi, thanks for your most welcome comments. The fact that you have taken time to make them is very much appreciated.


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  28. I love the way you started with the artwork... 'planes of light and shadow' and then you found the layers of life Wyeth somehow painted into the emptiness of this Big Room. Brilliant poem Dave. Thank you for sharing.

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  29. Made me feel so nostalgic for times I have never known, and for my long-lost forbears; but at least now I can feel their link to me in this life.
    It feels like living outside of time.
    Wonderful imagery :)

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  30. some we've left behind
    in frock coats, crinolines
    and courtly manners; some have found
    eternal spring.

    Just lovely... some things just end, others new life is breathed into them. And the last three lines are just as amazing. Wonderful reflective mood, this poem evokes.

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