Sunday, 6 January 2013

Peace Within and Without

(The title was set by Mary in Poetics at dVerse Poets)

a peaceful scene
gives space
to rest the eye

a tranquil scene
small waves
that kiss the land

the distant hills
landsculpts
of restfulness

the only sound
belongs
to gliding birds

long sleepy waves
of flight
take mind in tow

but active minds
prepare
for inner peace

do not require
stasis
or stifled cries

to life - all life -
they give
priority

play host and put
to rights
the mess of its

fecundity
its noise
and bafflement

its rooms set right
the heart
content at last

26 comments:

  1. A peaceful scene - balm for the eyes and the soul.

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  2. Active minds have quite a challenge ahead of them. Some days a bit of stasis would be lovely.

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  3. i think real peace is independent from what's happening outside...it can help to get the mind to rest but then goes beyond...that's how i understand what you wrote..and i would so agree..

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  4. This is a new form for you, Dave. It worked well, and I like your message. I do think Claudia captured it well.

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  5. ...you offered a wide scope of understanding in which we can achieve peace variety of forms and shapes...and you are pretty much even with your 4-2-4 count in syllables here... an exceptional offering indeed sir...smiles...

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  6. Dave, this put me at ease. Let the day begin.

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  7. idunno...keeping the peace at my house, you need a clean scene---at least in the living room...ha...a dirty house or chaotic house adds a level of stress...

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  8. This post shows your versatility Dave - short and crisp scenes of peace like gliding birds in flight ~

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  9. Hi Dave, actually to see birds' hovering and gliding brings me peace for eye and then to my mind.
    I remember many spectacular scenes beyond my favorite pond for migratory birds.

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  10. Love this, Dave:

    the only sound
    belongs
    to gliding birds

    long sleepy waves
    of flight
    take mind in tow

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  11. The active mind goes so far before it needs the peaceful scene again to recharge and gain some balance... At least of me that is. I loved the poem and saw myself in both parts of it.

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  12. I love this Dave - it even gives one a sense of peace to read it.

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  13. I like how these little droplets leave a thought in the mind to float around and then another droplet carries the story along.

    Morning breeze
    Carries a winter day—
    The squeal of birds

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  14. This is what I need. Although a too active mind---

    I love the word landsculpts. Thanks. k.

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  15. It's perfect for Buddhist meditation!

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  16. Active or at rest...there is peace to be found...within. An inspirational message, Dave.

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  17. Sometimes we yearn for serenity. I found it here today.

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  18. This is one of those that I will have to re-read again and again. It seems much simpler in thought than I know it is.

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  19. long sleepy waves of flight take mind in tow but active minds prepare for inner peace.

    An ideal poem to read just before bed, thank you.

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  20. Landsculpts of restlessness... Love this!

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  21. a peaceful poem to read as I begin my day!

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  22. jabblog
    Thanks so much.

    The Elephant's Child
    Yup, I wouldn't disagree with that!

    Claudia
    I agree compltely with your first point. Yes, I think we're on the same wavelength. I was looking at the elements that make for peace externally and using them as similes for inner peace. Thanks for the comment.

    Mary
    Thanks for saying this. Good to know you thought it worked well.

    Kelvin
    Thank you for your response, I am rather overwhelmed by it. It is much appreciated.

    Raining Iguanas
    Wow, that's a great comment. Thanks, and a very warm welcome to you.

    Brian
    Know what you mean, definitely know what you mean!

    Heaven
    Thanks for saying so, it is much appreciated.

    haricot
    Yes, exactly, there is something essentially peaceful about a bird in flight - even birds of prey!

    Laurie
    Thank you so much. Your comments are always much valued.

    Carl
    Thanks for this Carl. You couldn't have said anything more encouraging.

    David
    Sincere thanks.

    The Weaver of Grass
    A really heartening comment. Much thanks.

    Frank
    Hi, a warm welcome to you. I love your comment very much indeed.

    manicddaily
    Thanks for this -- I was hoping someone might pick this out as I was unsure of it.

    Tommaso
    Fantastic observation. Thanks.

    Bodhirose
    Hi, Good to have your visit and your very astute comment. Thanks for both.

    rumoursofrhyme
    I agree with your opening words, am chastened by the rest. Thank you very much indeed.

    Tabor
    A most encouraging response. Thank you so much for it.

    Cait
    A warm welcome to you and warm thanks for your kind comment.

    mrs mediocrity
    Really good to know this -- I had been unsure ans was hoping for some feedback. Thank you.


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  23. Robyn Greenhouse
    Hi, A warm welcome to you. Good to have you visiting and many thanks for leaving a comment.

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  24. Beautiful tranquil words Dave and the possibility of peace is within us all - if we ignore the outside world.

    Like your new form too - skilfully done.

    Anna :o]

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  25. Beautiful tranquil words Dave and the possibility of peace is within us all - if we ignore the outside world.

    Like your new form too - skilfully done.

    Anna :o]

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