tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post208164708566810650..comments2023-12-28T13:11:06.666+00:00Comments on Pics and Poems: Rust BucketDave Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-21262703249195075722011-08-17T11:28:18.387+01:002011-08-17T11:28:18.387+01:00Jim
Interesting comment, Jim. Much thanks for it. ...<b>Jim</b><br />Interesting comment, Jim. Much thanks for it. I did actually change where I was going to take it during its composition. The end, though, was always in sight. I hadn't picked up that readers might be thrown by the change of rhythm. (I'm not saying that you were, only that they might be.)<br /><br /><b>Rachna</b><br />That's good to know. Thank you for telling.<br /><br /><b>The Weaver of Grass</b><br />Appreciate the comment. Thanks.<br /><br /><b>flaubert</b><br />Thank you for the feedback. <br /><br /><b>kaykuala</b><br />indeed so, seems to be especially so this week! Your comment encourages!<br /><br /><b>Victoria</b><br />Thank you so much for that comment. It means a lot.<br /><br /><b>120 Socks</b><br />Thanks for the encouraging response.<br /><br /><b>Windsmoke</b><br />Good that itcame across like that - it was certainly unnexpected at the time!Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-56198174399725379552011-08-16T23:27:37.433+01:002011-08-16T23:27:37.433+01:00Fantastic imagery especially the last stanza with ...Fantastic imagery especially the last stanza with an unexpected twist :-).Windsmoke.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12225394580987872677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-8251633333437726182011-08-16T21:31:01.735+01:002011-08-16T21:31:01.735+01:00Instant connection - well done as always Dave!Instant connection - well done as always Dave!Louisehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05912071192179983603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-8456634725987106112011-08-16T18:41:43.552+01:002011-08-16T18:41:43.552+01:00David, you do such a good job of allowing the read...David, you do such a good job of allowing the reader to share your experience. The metaphor worked well. Growing up in California, I've been there!Victoriahttp://liv2write2day.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-61858663368398813892011-08-16T18:04:07.328+01:002011-08-16T18:04:07.328+01:00Dave,
Can be quite daunting when in the course of ...Dave,<br />Can be quite daunting when in the course of checking with a view of confirming we get slapped in the face. Forces against good intentions often are constantly harassing our progress.kaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-14636584215383035172011-08-16T16:59:02.509+01:002011-08-16T16:59:02.509+01:00Wonderful imagery in this, Dave.
PamelaWonderful imagery in this, Dave.<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-33811337557139125742011-08-16T15:10:24.686+01:002011-08-16T15:10:24.686+01:00Very clever indeed Dave.Very clever indeed Dave.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-28898864959871701312011-08-16T13:24:38.247+01:002011-08-16T13:24:38.247+01:00I always enjoy your poetry, Dave. I could visualiz...I always enjoy your poetry, Dave. I could visualize the sea and the gently lapping waves.Rachna Chhabriahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16900999965919504282noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-839396409356646932011-08-16T12:55:58.487+01:002011-08-16T12:55:58.487+01:00I did wonder where you were going with this at fir...I did wonder where you were going with this at first, Dave, but I liked how the final stanza sent me reeling in a different direction. An unusually subdued punch line too. No matter how I read it. Not a bad thing, just an observation. I think rhythmically I was looking for another line along the lines of, "like a da dah da dah da dah," but it doesn't need it.<br /><br>Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.com