tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post8136125162281367100..comments2023-12-28T13:11:06.666+00:00Comments on Pics and Poems: Anatomy of a StormDave Kinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-26433388871361625332008-12-10T11:58:00.000+00:002008-12-10T11:58:00.000+00:00PoetikatYes, avery useful term. I am in the proces...Poetikat<BR/><BR/>Yes, avery useful term. I am in the process of using it again in another poem, but I will try not to overuse it. (Doesn't always scan very well, though.)Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-12391916028921279902008-12-10T11:56:00.000+00:002008-12-10T11:56:00.000+00:00MaekitsoSo sorry I overlooked this earlier. Not su...Maekitso<BR/><BR/>So sorry I overlooked this earlier. Not sure how that happened. Will have to review my system!!<BR/>Thanks for the comment, though. Much appreciated - not sure full deserved, but I'm willing tolet that go!Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-26891807974810564562008-12-09T15:35:00.000+00:002008-12-09T15:35:00.000+00:00Dave, I'd never heard the term "Thaumaturge" befor...Dave, I'd never heard the term "Thaumaturge" before so, I googled it and read about it on Wikipedia. What a fantastic word and ideology. I will store that one away for future use.<BR/><BR/>I'm enjoying your increasingly.<BR/>KatKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-48260429593443601972008-11-29T09:26:00.000+00:002008-11-29T09:26:00.000+00:00I could say this is brilliant, but that wouldn't e...I could say this is brilliant, but that wouldn't even begin to express the electricity in this piece, Dave. Awesome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-28127355144255448152008-11-28T11:57:00.000+00:002008-11-28T11:57:00.000+00:00Weaver of GrassThat is very encouraging, thanks. T...<B>Weaver of Grass</B><BR/><BR/>That is very encouraging, thanks. The poem was meant to be one long metaphor, but I wasn't sure it would work.<BR/><BR/><B>Tumblewords</B><BR/><BR/>Thanks for that, and thanks for dropping by.<BR/><BR/><B>Sorlil</B><BR/><BR/>I share your doubt about what is and what is not a prose poem, but I gladly settle for the thrust of your comment. Thanks.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-65583822458493248312008-11-27T14:27:00.000+00:002008-11-27T14:27:00.000+00:00I'm never entirely sure what makes a poem a prose ...I'm never entirely sure what makes a poem a prose poem but this strikes me as a prose poem. Lots of striking images esp. the dervishes and the rag dolls. Well done!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-45878130174035624422008-11-26T19:14:00.000+00:002008-11-26T19:14:00.000+00:00A delightful read. The many layers are a treasure ...A delightful read. The many layers are a treasure as well as the internal rhyming which created the 'storm' and drang of sky and life.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-64631111668649608262008-11-26T15:15:00.000+00:002008-11-26T15:15:00.000+00:00I think your choice of photograph at the end of th...I think your choice of photograph at the end of the poem says it all - I see the whole poem as a metaphor. I love the simile of ink dropped in water - very powerful.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-18258662347935361732008-11-26T08:50:00.000+00:002008-11-26T08:50:00.000+00:00WatermaidI found your comments very reassuring as ...<B>Watermaid</B><BR/><BR/>I found your comments very reassuring as I thought long and hard about dropping that last verse, in part for the reason you mention.<BR/><BR/><B>Janice</B><BR/><BR/>Thanks for that, the attempt to construct an on-going metaphor of the two was where I began - after the first line just floated into my mind.<BR/><BR/><B>Dave </B><BR/><BR/>yes, it was meant as metaphor, but I did make it as meteorologically<BR/>accurate as possible.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-68382940095195212802008-11-26T06:47:00.000+00:002008-11-26T06:47:00.000+00:00Fine, rich stuff, Dave, whether taken as meteorolo...Fine, rich stuff, Dave, whether taken as meteorological or metaphorical.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-26940781127364910642008-11-25T16:52:00.000+00:002008-11-25T16:52:00.000+00:00"...great and good and those behind the great and ..."...great and good and those behind the great and good became<BR/>charged particle or thunderbolt, loose cannon in the making."<BR/>Isn't this the way of the general masses who follow leaders without deep reflection of what they stand for. I quite liked this strong metaphorical poem of the anatomy of a storm and human actions.Janice Thomsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02506920585319893814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-22101235582153669182008-11-25T16:45:00.000+00:002008-11-25T16:45:00.000+00:00The last verse is magnificent: I love the ink simi...The last verse is magnificent: I love the ink simile and the images you conjure up with 'the wind drags surface / sheets like rag dolls, and corkscrews / them the way magicians fan their cards'. Such a density of simile and metaphor doesn't usually work. I have to confess ignorance of 'The Might Thaumaturge'. I'll have to Google.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-29246387470045052852008-11-25T09:14:00.000+00:002008-11-25T09:14:00.000+00:00Swissfaith-mad. I think they have to be. It's a ve...<B>Swiss</B><BR/><BR/>faith-mad. I think they have to be. It's a very special kind of madness, something akin to religious zeal. Or ignored.<BR/><BR/><B>Muse Swings</B><BR/><BR/>I enjoyed my visit. Thanks for yours.<BR/><BR/><B>Tommaso</B><BR/><BR/>Wow! I've never been compared with Shelley before! Praise indeed! Thanks.<BR/><BR/><B>J.C.</B><BR/><BR/> doubt that any of us master it, but thanks for the compliment.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-67699873491517663922008-11-24T20:17:00.000+00:002008-11-24T20:17:00.000+00:00Dave, this is one of the reasons why I love Englis...Dave, this is one of the reasons why I love English language although I believe I will never master it. Fascinating.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-65372783115222543602008-11-24T19:41:00.000+00:002008-11-24T19:41:00.000+00:00Dear Dave, great poem indeed, and a great surprise...Dear Dave, great poem indeed, and a great surprise to find it. <BR/>And I always arrive late considering the comments.<BR/>I am reading and talking of Shelley to a final class in these days, I can hear something close to Ode To The West Wind here.<BR/>Best wishes, DavideTommaso Gervasuttihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17137499390434949734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-51879289405099467632008-11-24T18:04:00.000+00:002008-11-24T18:04:00.000+00:00Thank you for stopping by my blog! Your poem is wo...Thank you for stopping by my blog! Your poem is wonderful - very strong, energetic and descriptive. I'll be back to read more. <BR/>CynthiaMuseSwingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11999288873532715380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-82968368314058898022008-11-24T17:26:00.001+00:002008-11-24T17:26:00.001+00:00This comment has been removed by the author.swisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-80768087217059412182008-11-24T17:26:00.000+00:002008-11-24T17:26:00.000+00:00all scientists are mad!!?nope, can't be having tha...all scientists are mad!!?<BR/>nope, can't be having that!swisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-78440400988772035762008-11-24T09:04:00.000+00:002008-11-24T09:04:00.000+00:00JimThanks for that. Am not sure if you meant that ...<B>Jim</B><BR/>Thanks for that. Am not sure if you meant that the first verse <I>should</I> be one sentence. If so, am not sure about that, but will certainly correct the sp. Off the top of my head, I can see the force of undercurrent, but think it would have to be undercurrents - which is technically inaccurate.<BR/><BR/><B>Dots</B><BR/>Welcome and many thanks. No, I am sure it is not inevitable, but often is so.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-82346740514244169882008-11-24T00:48:00.000+00:002008-11-24T00:48:00.000+00:00'With energy came arrogance'.... is it always inev...'With energy came arrogance'.... is it always inevitable? Like with power comes corruption... but with power also comes responsibilty..<BR/>Loved your writing... what you write says something subtle, underneath the words that you write... makes one think.<BR/><BR/>DotsDotshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13237109888870178115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-2936160633744504652008-11-23T16:46:00.000+00:002008-11-23T16:46:00.000+00:00Quite good, Dave. I especially liked the opening t...Quite good, Dave. I especially liked the opening two lines to the last stanza and the internal rhyme, wind drags / rag dolls, was excellent I would have a wee look at your punctuation however. The first stanza reads like a single sentence to me and I think you're missing a closing dash after 'it seemed' in the second stanza. Also 'cauldron' was misspelled. Do you think undercurrent would work better than 'deep current'?Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-91514910180106526742008-11-23T11:25:00.000+00:002008-11-23T11:25:00.000+00:00CloudiaGreat compliment! Thanks.Cloudia<BR/>Great compliment! Thanks.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-28640363590602019662008-11-22T22:47:00.000+00:002008-11-22T22:47:00.000+00:00Great sky - but richer description!Aloha-Great sky - but richer description!<BR/>Aloha-Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-52834285362624409302008-11-22T19:21:00.000+00:002008-11-22T19:21:00.000+00:00Mad Bush Farm CrewThanks for that. I must look up ...Mad Bush Farm Crew<BR/><BR/>Thanks for that. I must look up Colin McCahon. Sounds interesting.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2508563923634392703.post-75733403971591165722008-11-22T18:37:00.000+00:002008-11-22T18:37:00.000+00:00Such is the force of nature described in your word...Such is the force of nature described in your words. <BR/><BR/>Your incredible poem reminds me of New Zealand artist Colin McCahon's Storm Warning. Colin used the power of words in combination with his art to describe events in teh context of nature.<BR/><BR/>Great work Dave. Keep sharing you're a talented writer and poet.<BR/><BR/>All the best<BR/>LizLizhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05100812038496671783noreply@blogger.com