Thursday, 13 January 2011

Symphony


The above image was provided by Magpie Tales as this week's prompt.

Out of a wood
birds black as jet
one at a time
like beads on a string -
an invisible string -
like notes on a stave.

There must be a hand
a baton
a man
behind what I see
and sounds of a theme
I'm unable to hear.

It's deep in the woods -
double bass and all that -
but over the fields
they rise with eclat.
Then piccolos scatter.
Percussion of guns.

Each motif repeats
understated the change
the woodwinds take hold
(Well they would
would they not?),
clarinets and bassoons.

The high flying beats -
staccato of wings -
introduce a new thought
the woodpecker
pecks at
from out in the wings.

The clash of ideas
emotions and sounds
reaches crescendo
moves me to tears.
It's there in the score
for those who can't hear.

But even in silence
the brain can read sounds
and metaphors peep
through a forest of notes
whilst the birds of the air
sing our babies to sleep.

23 comments:

  1. If only more people would slow down and just listen!
    There are Adagios waiting to be found everywhere.
    Loved it, could here each subtle note and sound.

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  2. Dave, this is so beautiful. I began music lessons and the flute at the tender age of nine ... it's part of who I am. Your poem tells me music is also YOU.

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  3. Oh, I love the first couple parts in particular. The clash of ideas is apropos in today's confusing and stormy atmosphere.

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  4. This is great. I love those breathy little iambs driving the poem on, creating a sense of almost urgent rejoicing. Delightful.

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  5. I love this poem. I have a friend who literally can hear the music in her head while reading a score. High flying sounds, woodpeckers in the wings - there are so many things I love about this poem.

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  6. Then piccolos scatter - FAB
    It's the flautist in me :)

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  7. Those last two verses are stunning...

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  8. I always think that rooks sitting on the electric wires look strangely like music, Dave. I once wrote a haiku:

    Black crows on a wire
    making black apreggios
    in the morning sky.

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  9. WOW! Very nice, imaginative! What an awesome way with words. Thank you. Thanks for your visit and kind words as well. Have a lovely day! :)

    https://lynnaima.wordpress.com/

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  10. The high flying beats -
    staccato of wings -
    introduce a new thought
    the woodpecker
    pecks at
    from out in the wings...


    enjoyed every line of your poem,
    vivid, sound, fun, and beautiful.

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  11. Dave... Then piccolos scatter./Percussion of guns.

    I can babble on about where each stanza goes for me, but I think the best I can say, and I feel it so often with your work--this, perhaps the most yet--the breadth of vocabulary from which you draw for imagery, the juxtaposition so often of beauty or seeming joy and something more complex and darker, the movement to a broader theme--Dave, your words make me tear up from beauty and pain, and they make me think. What on earth MORE could someone's poetry do? And often you also make me laugh outright. Your blog is a blessing to many of us. Thank you.

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  12. Incredible poem, full of imagery and emotion. (Next time, I may go back to poetry.)

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  13. LOVE your poem! You get extra points for using "eclat," a word that really should get more exercise.

    Here's a bird-related treat for you in thanks:
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=omk6TAxJYOg&feature=related

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  14. this comes about when we listen, just listen... lovely!

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  15. something one could read again and again and yet never fully understand unless truely felt. loved it.

    and thank you for the comment on my blog, it sort of touched a chord somewhere.

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  16. Another fine piece of work, Dave.

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  17. Good work, David.
    (I remember our eldest stomping home from her first piano lesson, 9 years old, "I know what notes are! I don't need to be told they're like birdies perched on the phone wires!") Out of the mouths of babes . . .

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  18. Kipling
    Welcome. Good to have you commenting. Such a true comment, too. Absolutely.

    Helen
    Thank you so much for a very kind comment.

    TechnoBabe
    It's always interesting - and often very useful - to hear what strikes others, so much gratitude for your comments.

    Dibakar
    Thank you. Both you and your kowtow are most welcome!

    Dick
    Thanks for a really cheering comment.

    Kass
    Thanks Kass - it must be great to have your friend's ability. I am very envious.

    Gwei Mui
    Lovely comment. Thank you.

    jinksy
    My grateful thanks.

    Weaver of Grass
    I, too, have often had that thought. I have never done an ything with it, though, until now. The haiku is a real corker, I think.

    Kat
    I agree with you completely about the morning bird calls. They do often sound, I think, as though there's someone conducting them!

    lynnaima
    Hi and welcome! Thanks for visitng and leaving such a lovely comment.

    Jingle
    Thanks very much. The lines you have picked out are those I was most pleased with - so very gratifying.

    thingy
    thanks so much.

    Jeanette
    That is a really generous and lovely comment. Thank you for the time and care you must have put into it. I am humbled by your words.

    Suko
    Welcome and many thanks for the comment. I really am grateful for it.

    Fantastic Forrest
    Thanks for that. I agree with you that eclat is a very under-used word. Thanks also for the address which I shall follow up.

    Shadow
    Indeed... thanks.

    Raj
    Thanks very much for that. You are right in putting feeling at the top of the understanding stakes.

    David
    Much thanks. Greatly appreciated.

    Doctor FTSE
    I love that story. It speaks volumes.

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  19. Even the deaf can hear music
    on the mean streets, and midst
    the canyons of big cities, but
    only the poet musician can
    walk in a wood and stand stone
    still, poleaxed by the music,
    the beauty, the art of being
    a man alone doused in black
    wings, those black notes alive,
    soaring from pages within
    and without, creating a great
    amphitheater from the stuff
    gods have left for us to tramp
    about in, to dream in, and
    then to set in the silence with
    pen in hand, or hand to keys,
    and let the symphony rip.
    Wonderful piece!

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  20. Glenn
    A warm welcome to you and a big thank you for the thrilling comment. Good to have you with us.

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  21. A very satisfying read, David. Thanks for giving poets the opportunity.

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