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Saturday, 16 July 2011

Loneliness

being a response to this week's Poets United Think Tank prompt.


having a passion
with no one to share it -
that's being lonely

full of foreboding
no friend to put the mind at rest -
true loneliness

facing dilemmas -
lacking a true confidant
you face loneliness

some fine achievement
no one around to say good -
truly that's lonely

alone in a crowd
and no one takes note of you -
that equals lonely

your being dries up
your heart rhythms falter
memory withers

the you that there was
empties itself from inside
of all it was worth -
that truly is lonely.

15 comments:

SG said...

Very true. Even in the midst of people, sometimes we are very lonely.

Susannah said...

Nicely done and a good response to the prompt. You've summed up very well, a lot of the reasons why people feel lonely.

Philip Verghese'Ariel' said...

Great thoughts here, though surrounded with nmany often
feel lonely. But your concluding
stanza touched me well,
Thanks for the good narration
Best regards
Philip

flaubert said...

Dave, loneliness described very well here. Imagine not being able to share your thoughts with someone else.

Pamela

The Weaver of Grass said...

That just about sums it up Dave. It is possible to live alone and not be lonely - I have several friends who do - but they have such a lot of friends that there is always someone to share things with - I think that is the key.

Noelle said...

this poem rings so true...what loneliness does to a person....so sad.

TechnoBabe said...

Instead of lonely, maybe it is peace and quiet for some people.

Windsmoke. said...

What sums it up for me is the line "alone in a crowd", i reckon we've all been there at least one time in our lives :-).

Mary said...

Dave, you have captured 'loneliness.' I especially think about the loneliness of having a passion with no one to share it. SO hard.

David Cranmer said...

We've all felt this at one time or another. Nice, Dave.

Isabel Doyle said...

I hope that your pen helps keep the loneliness at bay ...
best wishes, Isabel x

Dave King said...

SG
Some would say most lonely then.

Susannah
Hi and a warm welcome to you. Thank you for the thoughtful comment.

Philip
Hi, good to have your comments. Much appreciate them and the visit.

flaubert
Exactly. Might as well not have them!

The Weaver of Grass
I agree. Just the realisation that there is someone "out there" can make the difference between alone and lonely.

Noelle
Very. Thank you for your visit and form commenting. Both very much appreciated.

TechnoBabe
Indeed, I'm sure it is, and that's fine.

Windsmoke
Yes, true. In some degree we probably all have.

Mary
Absolutely. The whole point is to share it. Without that it's merely an obsession.

David
Agreed. Thanks for commenting.

Isabel
Thanks. It would, I am sure, but just now it doesn't need to, so I am doubly fortunate.

jabblog said...

Beautifully expressed - you make loneliness sound almost desirable in a perverse kind of way.

Carl said...

Achingly true and sad.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Dave,

You have captured almost all of the many facets, which loneliness brings.
The self realisation, that you are alone, is a dreadfully sad station in life, to find oneself, standing there all alone.

Eileen