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Monday, 21 November 2011

The Kiss


The image is this week's Magpie Tales prompt.

Nothing exists
in their world
but the other.

At each point
and moment
of contact
nothing exists
but two pairs of lips.
His on hers.
Hers on his.
Self-pictures
are reduced to this

but in
the touch and press
of lips
awareness of
a universe.

Only the lips
are figured
on tactile
mappae mundi
that their brains
delineate

their bodies,
pure geometry,
are lost in space
are unread ideograms
scrawled across
a no-man's-land
of crumpled sheet.

Sensation is a match
flaring at the touch
to strong emotion
dying down again.

31 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice dave....i like the comparison of them to matches...burning at the tip where they come together it fits the rather interesting picture...

jane.healy said...

As always a perfect take on the picture.

Carl said...

Wow. Great poem for that prompt.

izzy said...

It fits in symmetry like you say
Good take!

kez said...

lovely thank you x

JJ Roa Rodriguez said...

awesome! i love it very much! "nothing exists but the other."

have a great week ahead sir!

JJRod'z

Mary said...

You brought the picture to life. I especially liked your last stanza!

Pat Hatt said...

Everything else stripped away and just them on display, wonderful verse.

Helen said...

Like this ... (I'm rethinking everything I thought I learned in that geometry class years ago.)

anthonynorth said...

A mystical kiss. Excellent.

ArtistUnplugged said...

Ahhhhhh, wonderful lip service!!! ;-D

Pearl said...

Very nice, Dave. :-)

Pearl

Sue said...

You words give this photo an added dimension while staying true to the essence of it.

Well done.

=)

Carrie Burtt said...

"Their bodies pure geometry"....this is pure brilliance Dave....an amazing poem!

Windsmoke. said...

Very enjoyable right from the first kiss to the last :-).

Heaven said...

Strong beautiful images...I love the pure geometry, match flaring, and pair of lips.

Lovely words ~

haricot said...

Physical and mental phenomenon melt into one moment...

Prion Indigo said...

hat is beautiful...the unity of mindfulness, mirroring meshed souls and intellects!

moondustwriter said...

Dave
I like the way you pulled other reference points in making this a map of the senses

Mama Zen said...

"unread ideograms
scrawled across
a no-man's-land
of crumpled sheet."

Fabulous!

Isabel Doyle said...

luscious poem Mr King

not sure about 'delineate', somehow it feels awkward?

many lovely lines and truth!

The Unknowngnome said...

Good job.

Arnab Majumdar said...

They're young explorers. In love. Getting lost. Then finding their way back again. Hmm...

Cheers...

Cad said...

Unread ideograms... nice...

Dave King said...

Brian
Thanks for saying that - the sort of thing it's helpful to know.

jane.healy
Thanks jane. Much obliged for the comment.

Carl
Thanks for those encouraging words.

izzy
Thanks izzy. Good to know these things.

kez
No, thank you. And welcome to the blog.

JJ Roa
Hi, Good to have your company and comment. Thank you for both.

Mary
Thanks, it was something of an afterthought, but I did think it fitted.

Pat
Many thanks for a useful piece of feedback.

Helen
My geometry classes were very drear. I liked them at the time, but non-Euclidian geometry is much more sexy!

anthonynorth
Thanks - are ther any other kinds. Those we give to aunts and big-wigs, I suppose.

ArtistUnplugged
Brilliant response. Thanks muchly!

Pearl
Good to know you like it. Thanks for saying.

Sue
Welcome to my blog and thank you for these kind words.

Carrie
A warm welcome to you and sincere thanks for your kind remarks.

Windsmoke
Which is at it should be, of course! Seriously, though. Great comment, duly appreciated. Thanks.

Heaven
Good to have your views. Thank you so much for them. They are much appreciated.

haricot
Lovely way of putting it. Thank you.

Prion
Hi! A warm welcome to my blog and many thanks for stopping by to comment. Your generous comment is very much valued.

moondustwriter
Hi! Good to have you visitng and commenting. Thank you for doing so. All views are much sought after.

Mama Zen
Thank you so much for the comment.

Isabel
Interesting point. It actually wasn't my first choice. I shall have another think! Thank you v much for raising it.

The Unknowngnome
Thank you. Appreciated.

Arnab
Yup, I'd settle for that! It's good to have you visiting. Thank you for commenting.

Cad
Hi Cad! Welcome and much thanks.

C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel Wilson said...

Really well done.

Doctor FTSE said...

Beautiful rendering of a kiss.

Tariq Mian said...

pure geometry, pure chemistry, pure kiss are part of sincerity.

Dave King said...

C Hummel
Hi, Welcome! Thank you for your visit and for leaving a comment. Both much appreciated.

Doctor FTSE
Thank you for saying so.

Tariq
Thank you for your comment.

Suzy said...

A kiss nicely depicted and in perfect harmony with the pic. Thanks for your nice comment on my blog.

susan m hinckley said...

a poem within a poem --
in
the touch and press
of lips
awareness of
a universe.

Really nice! Loved it.