The image is this week's Magpie Tales prompt.
Nothing exists
in their world
but the other.
At each point
and moment
of contact
nothing exists
but two pairs of lips.
His on hers.
Hers on his.
Self-pictures
are reduced to this
but in
the touch and press
of lips
awareness of
a universe.
Only the lips
are figured
on tactile
mappae mundi
that their brains
delineate
their bodies,
pure geometry,
are lost in space
are unread ideograms
scrawled across
a no-man's-land
of crumpled sheet.
Sensation is a match
flaring at the touch
to strong emotion
dying down again.
31 comments:
nice dave....i like the comparison of them to matches...burning at the tip where they come together it fits the rather interesting picture...
As always a perfect take on the picture.
Wow. Great poem for that prompt.
It fits in symmetry like you say
Good take!
lovely thank you x
awesome! i love it very much! "nothing exists but the other."
have a great week ahead sir!
JJRod'z
You brought the picture to life. I especially liked your last stanza!
Everything else stripped away and just them on display, wonderful verse.
Like this ... (I'm rethinking everything I thought I learned in that geometry class years ago.)
A mystical kiss. Excellent.
Ahhhhhh, wonderful lip service!!! ;-D
Very nice, Dave. :-)
Pearl
You words give this photo an added dimension while staying true to the essence of it.
Well done.
=)
"Their bodies pure geometry"....this is pure brilliance Dave....an amazing poem!
Very enjoyable right from the first kiss to the last :-).
Strong beautiful images...I love the pure geometry, match flaring, and pair of lips.
Lovely words ~
Physical and mental phenomenon melt into one moment...
hat is beautiful...the unity of mindfulness, mirroring meshed souls and intellects!
Dave
I like the way you pulled other reference points in making this a map of the senses
"unread ideograms
scrawled across
a no-man's-land
of crumpled sheet."
Fabulous!
luscious poem Mr King
not sure about 'delineate', somehow it feels awkward?
many lovely lines and truth!
Good job.
They're young explorers. In love. Getting lost. Then finding their way back again. Hmm...
Cheers...
Unread ideograms... nice...
Brian
Thanks for saying that - the sort of thing it's helpful to know.
jane.healy
Thanks jane. Much obliged for the comment.
Carl
Thanks for those encouraging words.
izzy
Thanks izzy. Good to know these things.
kez
No, thank you. And welcome to the blog.
JJ Roa
Hi, Good to have your company and comment. Thank you for both.
Mary
Thanks, it was something of an afterthought, but I did think it fitted.
Pat
Many thanks for a useful piece of feedback.
Helen
My geometry classes were very drear. I liked them at the time, but non-Euclidian geometry is much more sexy!
anthonynorth
Thanks - are ther any other kinds. Those we give to aunts and big-wigs, I suppose.
ArtistUnplugged
Brilliant response. Thanks muchly!
Pearl
Good to know you like it. Thanks for saying.
Sue
Welcome to my blog and thank you for these kind words.
Carrie
A warm welcome to you and sincere thanks for your kind remarks.
Windsmoke
Which is at it should be, of course! Seriously, though. Great comment, duly appreciated. Thanks.
Heaven
Good to have your views. Thank you so much for them. They are much appreciated.
haricot
Lovely way of putting it. Thank you.
Prion
Hi! A warm welcome to my blog and many thanks for stopping by to comment. Your generous comment is very much valued.
moondustwriter
Hi! Good to have you visitng and commenting. Thank you for doing so. All views are much sought after.
Mama Zen
Thank you so much for the comment.
Isabel
Interesting point. It actually wasn't my first choice. I shall have another think! Thank you v much for raising it.
The Unknowngnome
Thank you. Appreciated.
Arnab
Yup, I'd settle for that! It's good to have you visiting. Thank you for commenting.
Cad
Hi Cad! Welcome and much thanks.
Really well done.
Beautiful rendering of a kiss.
pure geometry, pure chemistry, pure kiss are part of sincerity.
C Hummel
Hi, Welcome! Thank you for your visit and for leaving a comment. Both much appreciated.
Doctor FTSE
Thank you for saying so.
Tariq
Thank you for your comment.
A kiss nicely depicted and in perfect harmony with the pic. Thanks for your nice comment on my blog.
a poem within a poem --
in
the touch and press
of lips
awareness of
a universe.
Really nice! Loved it.
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