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Thursday, 19 July 2012

A Way to Begin


Oh yeah, I dig this -
that the soul rolls
like a storm cloud through a valley.
And out of the valley, a subtle beat
is taking the heat right out of me...
It's deep, bass, rhythmic; it's regular guys,
but over it, quietly, softly, there flies,
flows, rolls, whispers the soul...
Trip and tremble and gasping, whole - and
mellow as moonlight, laid back as spring
and forging, as  spring, a way to begin.

14 comments:

cloudia charters said...

You are a classics-informed-hipster!



Warm Aloha, Dave

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Jenny Woolf said...

Sounds as if you have been listening to some very good jazz, Dave!

haricot said...

I also think of some melody line through your words. Sounds nice!

Heaven said...

I like the sounds of this ~

And the way the day to begin, like spring ~

Muhammad Israr said...

a way to begin...ah...beautiful as always by the one and only .... keep going, keep the flow and the rhythm and enchant us :)

Brian Miller said...

nice man....smooth rhyme to this one dave...spring is such a time of new beginnings as well....nice one man

kaykuala said...

There is a nice ring to the flow of words. Nicely done Dave!

Hank

Carl said...

I never know what to expect from your blog subject wise, but the writing is always top shelf! Another great poem.

Mary said...

Beautiful, Dave!

Tabor said...

Fascinating that you are able to successfully to write in this jazzy voice.

Gerry Snape said...

love love this poem Dave...fantastic spoken out!! thankyou.

Tommaso Gervasutti said...

Splendid rhythm and intensity. It reminds me of a collection by the great Irish Brendan Kennelly entitled exactly "Begin".

How strongly we do need beginnings!

Dulcina said...

To me your most poetic poem, I mean, the one which sounds more like a song, for good poetry is both music and painting.
Beautiful jazzy rhythmed rhymes to begin & end with.
It's got soul - not just the word - in it.

Dave King said...

cloudia
Wow! I've not heard of one of they before, but thanks Claudia!

Jenny
Not lately, alas, but I sure used to.

haricot
Thank you for this.

Heaven
Much thanks for saying so.

Muhammad
Lovely comment. Thanks.

Brian
Thanks. Good to know you thought so.

Hank
Much appreciated comment. Thank you.

Carl
Thanks. Really good to know you think so.

Mary
Much appreciated.

Tabor
Very much appreciated comment. Thank you so much.

Gerry
And thank you. Comments like this mean a lot.

Tommaso
Good thought. Only faintly familiar with Kennelly. Must look him up. Thanks.

Dulcina
Thank you so much. I do agree with your remarks re poetry, music and painting. Thank you very much for them.