Good evening, Evening Sunshine! Have you wondered how my day was going, alone and in a place we know so well? I thought I'd mail you, tell you what a strange experience I had. Ghost of a place, I'd say. I could not come to terms with it -- how nothing clicked the way it used to click. I saw the waterfall where we first met and walked where we have often walked before. I thought I knew each blade of grass, the sound that feet make on the boards that oversail the wetland strip. You taught me names of reeds and rushes there, and how to tell the summer song the robin sings from that he sings when winter comes. I thought I knew the pinetum's most distinctive smell, the sound of wind high in the trees -- do you remember how we once agreed it sounded like a brook? You taught me how to recognise the song -- what bird was it? the name eludes -- that sounded like a little-bit-of-bread-and-no-cheese. I had not thought until that day how birdsong might have lyrics... All this I had expected to be there as ever was. Alas, I did not recognise the place. How sad and boring rushes are! How colourless are reeds! The planks across the wetlands merely groaned from missing you. I heard the robin in the usual place, but could not tell without your high accompaniment to paint the notes which of his songs he sang. And in the pinetum's highest trees the wind this morning sounded like... the wind once more! I think the little-bit-of-bread-and-no-cheese bird had gorged on Gorgonzola late last night. (It's coming back -- the yellow hammer, yes?) The pinetum had no smell at all -- how could that possibly be so? Next time I go I will not go alone. XXX....................................................................
Poems of hate and Hope at dVerse Poets (Poetics)have set Missing You as theme for today.
26 comments:
But who will he go with? The one who taught him to savour the delights of nature, or another to drown them out?
Very evocative
Very pretty poem. I know exactly this feeling of traveling or visiting a desired place that just doesn't have that desirability if you cannot share it. The magic goes out! Very well described. k.
PS -Hi Dave! k.
oh birdsongs sure have lyrics...a little-bit-of-bread-and-no-cheese...love it dave...and next time you have to take someone with you and teach them all the things he taught you...and i'm sure you will be able to paint the notes again...
..i love the notion of 'how to tell the summer song..' so rich to bring many many things in mind... and how you ended this piece with that line is so brilliant... and promising... thanks for the poem.. genuinely enjoyed it..
Good day!
Sometimes we forget the obvious with so many things running. But good to reflect of what's at hand. Even a little Robin can tell us many things. Nicely Dave!
Hank
so beautiful how you lead the reader in...
"I had not thought until that day
how birdsong might have lyrics..."
this is brilliant... whenever i hear a bird from now on, i'll think of this.
thank you!
This one was very touching, Dave!
feel you man...someplaces its just not the same alone...but also just not the same if you are not sharing it with the one you last went there with as well...lots of emotion in this piece...happy sunday....
Awww... they sure taught you a lot. I hope you do take them next time you go.
I love the way you associated different imagery for different bird sounds.
Good writing once more Dave.
Loss and loneliness make such a powerful theme to this story against. I amazed at hyper reality of your description from memory compared to the description with of the same place without his companion. Very sad.
A much-loved place does have the unfortunate tendency feel bland and unfamiliar when visited without someone close, doesn't it?
Think I've been here too!!
Very sad, this thought that nature enjoyed with someone I love would not be the same when they were gone.
Brilliant, extremely touching and a great honor to whomever you wrote or to whomever the speaker wrote. I hope it is not fiction -- it would be so much more beautiful if it were true.
Aww - the absence of a loved one makes all the difference and makes a once-cherished memory bittersweet.
I agree with John - this is very evocative. What an amazing poem.
The opening here is instantly involving, and I especially loved the descriptive middle which brings your location to life...the saddest part is how the poem feels so much more alive in recounting the memory than in the present it actually lives in. Great job with this, Dave.
What a sensorial poem! It was one of those pieces that opened up each and every pore in my body. Beautiful with very vivid descriptions. Many thanks.
Greetings from London.
Wonderfully descriptive and nostalgic piece...very difficult to revisit those places without the one to share it with...they just don't look the same, but as the birds in this, always have little messengers to pull at the heartstrings...great poem..got completely wrapped up in it
your work is often more complex than my simple bear brain. But I do enjoy the shiny jingling things you plant:
"gorged on Gorgonzola"
Hmmm, now to look for some cheese. . .
Wishing YOU a sweet week,
with Aloha from Honolulu
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Hey Dave, I suggest you delete all those links from "Anonymous." They look suspicious to me.
This is sublime--beauty without someone to share it with becomes burdensome to the beholder. :)
Your lines remind me of definitely something...but not exactly someone...I just have experienced such feeling some day and in some place, I think so.
To All
Again I am somewhat up against the time factor, but wish to thank you all so much for a really moving set of responses. Sufficient perhaps to say that I have read through them all more than once and have found them all totally delightful. Some pertinent questions and some light hearted remarks, but all very much valued and taken note of. Thank you all, it is comments like these that remind me why we do this strange thing called blogging!
Oh, Dave, you got me with the last two lines. The scenery and building mood are both vivid and detailed. The melancholy, palpable.
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