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Saturday, 31 December 2011

Crystallines for the New Year

A form of couplet expounded by Denis M Garrison on dVerse Poets among an intriguing collection of couplet forms. Do pop over and have a browse through them. The crystalline, I learn from Denise, was inspired by the haiku, has 17 syllables, combines Japanese clarity with English sound harmony and has a turn between the lines. It also takes a title. I did not find the form easy, but here goes:-

CHILD ART
Chalked daffodils on pavement stone
cut vapour trails where planes have flown.

GARDEN COUTURE
Four tiny roses opened this last week -
winter's rags are touched with chic!

SEASONAL CHEER
A Father Christmas out of time
remonstrates with children for some crime.

RING IN THE NEW
Church bells ringing loud and clear...
could we but practice for the whole new year...



To all good souls who've walked this way,
to all good soul's who've not,
a sparkling New Year's Eve and Day.
For twenty-twelve a brilliant lot
to you and all those dear.
That's it for now, see you next year!

26 comments:

Brian Miller said...

excellent dave...that first one for me Childs Art steals the show...that is full of awesome imagery and expansion for only 17 sylables....great stuff...happy new year man!

The Unknowngnome said...

Ring in the New...does it for me.

See ya next year!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, Dave, I think you did a good job with them I particularly love the daffodils and the roses.

jabblog said...

You rose to the challenge with your usual panache - well done:-)

Grace said...

I like the couplet poems specially the garden couture.

Thanks for sharing your awesome poems and writings as I marvel at your craft. Wishing you Happy New Year !

Cheers ~

(aka Heaven)

haricot said...

What a nice present for the New Year's Eve. I enjoyed these verses a lot. Thank you very much.

manicddaily said...

I agree with Brian that the first one really steals the show, though they are all well-done.

Have a very brilliant lot yourself next year! (The brilliance is sort of assured.)

Take care, k.

Laurie Kolp said...

Ahh... now this is how Crystallines should be done... beautiful, Dave! And of course kids and chalk will always get me.

Happy New Year to you, too.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Y'know Dave - sometimes your poetry makes me swear with the genious of it!

I just did that with the beautiful simplicity of Child Art!

Have a wonderful New Year!

Anna :o]

Mary said...

You have nailed the form, Dave!

Have a wonderful New Year!

Ygraine said...

I'd hate to have to choose my favourite of these, they're all so good!
How I admire your talent :)

Here's hoping 2012 is your best ever year!

Tabor said...

What intriguing fun. Never heard of these and wonder how they got hte name. You seem to do the exercise well. Perhaps one days I will try this.

Lolamouse said...

Dave,
Loved your crystallines! Thank you for the New Year's wishes. I wish you the best for 2012 as well.

Taylor Boomer said...

perfect rhyming and story telling, well done.

Tommaso Gervasutti said...

Great in particular RING IN THE NEW.
"Let's practise
yes"

Happy New Year

Beachanny said...

Loved them all. Thank you for the brilliant crystallines shining for us all. What great use of the pivot (kireji) in all. This is definitely well achieved! Thanks for the New Year Wishes and for linking. Hope your year is filled with more inspiration! Gay

Rose said...

Tremendously fantastic! Happy New Year to you Dave xxx

Windsmoke. said...

Very interesting indeed i may attempt to write a crystalline in the future. Let me get this right a crystalline is a poem with 17 syllables combined in two lines with a sound harmony is this correct?? :-).

John Hayes said...

A delightful form skillfully handled! A very happy New Year to you & yours.

zongrik said...

i like how the roses make the rags look like nice clothes.

Bagman and Butler said...

Yes...I hope to follow you more closely next year.

Dave King said...

Brian
Glad you like the child art. Thanks for saying.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.

The Unknowngnome
Thanks. Good to know.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


jabblog
Kind words. Thanks
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Grace
Hi and much thanks for saying.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


haricot
Lovely comment. Thanks.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


manicddaily
Thanks for your good wishes.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Laurie
Kids and chalk for me, too. Thanks.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


HyperCRYPTICal
Wow, I consider that a top compliment! Thanks for it.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Mary
Thanks for another lovely comment.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Ygraine
Thank you so much!
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Tabor
I, too, had not heard of them and wondered about the name. Shall have to do abit of digging.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Lolamouse
Thanks for this and all past comments.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Taylor Boomer
Hi and welcome to my blog. Thank you so much for your thoughts.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Tommaso
Thanks, but I didn't quite nail that bit, what I had in mind was rehearsing the year to come!
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Beachanny
Hi, a warm welcome to you, and thank you so much for your thoughts on the post.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Rose
Wow! Thanks greatly.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Windsmoke
That's just about it, but if you want the full SP why not take the link from my post to dVerse Poets?
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


John Hayes
Hi, really good to hear from you. Thanks so much.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


zongrik
Hi, welcome and many thanks.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.


Bagman and Butler
Hi Good to have your visit. Thanks a lot.
May 2012 be a really great and glorious year for you and yours.

Nicholas V. said...

Interesting form... I'll try it sometime.
I particularly like the second one.

Dave King said...

Nicholas V
Thanks for your past and present support and many apologies for not keeping up with my replies. Have a great new year.

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