Last Sunday Kerry at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads challenged us to produce a poem in Waltz Wave Form. This requires lines of 1,2,1,2,3,2,1.2.3.4.3,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,1 Having not got around to it until last evening - so much excitement in my life of late - I have now come up with this.
A
puff of
breath
and there
is rhythm
in my
soul
and I
am dancing
with the wind for
company.
Come dance
my
lover,
dance for joy.
When life
seems
ending
Dance!
24 comments:
Congratulations -- well deserved!
Dance of joy indeed Dave! Well done, and yes, definitely deserved.
Congratulations.
No surprise to me that your blog would get picked, Dave. As for the wee poem? Cute. I’m not a big fan of contrived forms like this. For me form always reveals itself in the writing or comes after the words are down on the page. Which is why I’ve never written a sonnet or a sestina.
Congratulations - well deserved:-)
Your Waltz Wave verse is a masterpiece!
Congrats on the well deserved honor good sir.
Indeed deserved honor, Dave. You really have a variety of styles to your writing & I hope some new people were drawn to your blog after the write-up.
I was meaning to do the wave poem, but I procrastinated and never did get to it. Nicely crafted!!
Congratulations, Dave!
Quick, quick, slow...
Amusing and elegant. These lines themselves look dancing.
Congratulations, Dave!
Hi Mr Dave,its great news,congradulations to you,keep up your good work.
Congrats on being feature on Poets united this week - that is well-deserved. I'm pleased to see you tried out this form - your dance seemed light as air.
Congratulations! These lines are beautiful...
Congrats on being Blog of the Week. You really are a tremendous poet. OH yeah, you paint too. OH and you write stories.
Congratulations, Dave. And thanks for these drafts of joy as the wind blows hard and long across the fields here.
Congratulations Dave for the Poets of The Week.
Great Dance here.
Congratulations - well deserved I would say Dave.
What a clever use of that numerical sequence too.
Bonza, well done :-).
Congratulations if there is anyone who deserves this it is you indeed.
When life seems ending Dance - a lovely poem as usual:D
Congratulations Dave - so richly deserved. :o)
Oh, I so love this poem, Dave - such lilt and joy in it. I tried this form too, about Wild Woman spending half the day trying to screw her head on - and then I lost the poem! hee hee.
Isabel
Much thanks.
Titus
Thank you, good of you to say so.
Christine
Many thanks.
Jim
I can understand that. For me there's the dead serious stuff and the fun stuff. Contrived forms usually come in the latter, but they can also be part of the learning curve and then they become serious by another door.
jabblog
Thank you for your kind words on both counts. I enjoyed playing with the form. Had never before encountered it.
Carl
Thank you very much.
Mary
I'm just hoping that "a variety of styles" (not just from you, I might add) isn't code for "haven't found your voice yet"(which I couldn't deny)! Either way, thanks for your very kind comments.
haricot
Nice come back. Much appreciated.
Laurie
Many thanks.
sunny
Thanks a lot.
KerryMuch appreciate the congrats and the critique. Thank you.
Ash
Hi! Good to have your comments. Thank you for visiting and for saying.
TechnoBabe
Now you're making me blush. Thanks though!
Dick
Yeah, well there's wind and then there's wind. I was just meaning wind. Hope it blows over soon for you.
Tommaso
Thank you for saying so.
Weaver of Grass
Thank you, Weaver. I did find it quite challenging. Made 2 or 3 false starts. Fun, though.
Windsmoke
Cheers!
Rose
Thank you so much for that. Very greatly appreciated.
Other Mary
Kind words. Thank you.
Sherry Blue Sky
Hi, really good to have you visiting. Thank you for your comments.
Poor, headless woman, no wonder she was wild.
A joyous celebration of a poem! Congratulations on your blog being chosen for Poets United! You definitely deserve the recognition.
You so deserve the recognition Dave for all of your wonderful writings and supportive comments you have given all of us. Kudos.
Lolamouse
Thank you so much - on both counts.
The Unknowngnome
A most generous remark. I do thank you for it.
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