The streets seem in indecent haste cannot wait to rush together somewhere just above our thoughts where all lines of perspective meet. There buildings will collide as one. A single point. A sonic boom. Illustrious men will turn to stone who never left a stone unturned and strong men will still stand alone. Yule Brynner gazing from his throne finds enchantment in a bird. The King and I now seems absurd. Commands his subjects. Make him fly. Fly bird and he to some high nest lay the musical to rest above the clash of steel and glass above the clash of skin and class above the narrowing of space space to breathe and space for grace where concrete bleeds and flesh is stone and every babe is fully grown all men are born of every race and nature is man's interface. ........................... Written for The Magpie Tales picture prompt.
24 comments:
The richness of your learning,
talent, and experience,
thrills
with elegance,
simplicity.
Spare.
Perfect.
Uplifting.
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In other words:
Thank You, Dave"
This is so deep - and beautifully done.
Dave,
It's a rendering of emotions of a man who stands above many.
Hank
Fabulous ending..the clash was really catchy!!So deep comprehension,just as I expected but I'm getting used to it now.The magpie prompt beautifully captured!
So rich and I love how you pull it all together!
I'm afraid I may have lost my comment. What I said was that this was really too good a poem to focus on Yule Brenner. You may want to revise at some point to move a little further from the prompt. (Not that it doesn't work for the prompt, which, of course, it does.) K.
"Illustrious men will turn to stone
who never left a stone unturned
and strong men will still stand alone."
Love the poem, especially the above phrase.
Gorgeous. Your theme, being universal, absolutely transcends the photo and makes it (to me) more interesting. Thank you.
Rich and deep. A wonderful poem.
nice dave...fantastic poem...and def with its depth...love the birds flight or call to fly in that second stanza...
Powerful and solemn, it reminds me of Marlowe.
The climax is reached in “above the clash of steel and glass
above the clash of skin and class”.
I found Universal Soul in your words here.
'Everyone is Everybody Else' came to mind, a state of being where all knowledge is perceived by everyone.
I'm probably not making a great deal of sense here, so I'll just say I truly love this, and have read it ten times so far....
My two favourite movies starring Yule Brynner are The Magnificent Seven & The King and I, this is a fine poem for a fine actor :-).
Amazing what this prompt has brought forth.
A cityscape image is powerful and you have produced a powerful reply.
Nature usualy has overpower men, while in your poem love and power of the King is absolute, and it beautifuly convinces me.
So full of energy, yet has an undertone that brings it balance..and a "sonic boom"!!
I love the spiralling meanings and shifts in perspective in this piece, Dave. Somehow seems to complement the rising perspective of the image. Well done!
love the way it was said... beautiful...
JJRod'z
It's a beautiful write up DAVE.
Deep thoughts giving a lot of message.
Thank you.
Cloudia
Wow, I'm more than a little non-plussed. Thank YOU!
anthonynorth
Thank you.
kaykuala
Great cmment. Thanks.
Rohit
Much appreciate this comment. My thanks to you - and the Magpie prompt.
Everyday Goddess
Welcome and many thanks for the compliment.
manicddaily
Take the point. It should work without the prompt. I agree. Thanks.
Rachna
Thanks for the useful feedback.
ds
Wow! I couldn't ask for much more than that, could I? Thanks greatly.
Carl
Great response. Thank you so much.
Brian
As always, a useful comment. Thanks.
Tommaso
I could certainly settle for Marlowe. Thanks for saying so!
Ygraine
Yes, you made perfect sense. It's an interesting observation. Universal soul is not a concept I have studied, but I've met it and could be happy with it. Thanks a lot.
Windsmoke
A fine actor indeed.
Friko
I do find that visual prompts open up a lot of possibilities. Some that initially seem the least promising hide the most possibilities.
haricot
Thank you. Much appreciate your reply.
Lyn
Hi, and welcome to the blog. Your visit and your comment are much appreciated.
Nicholas V
Thank you for this. It's pretty much what I set out to do, so good to know.
JJ ROA
Welcome, thanks for your visit and for the comment.
tariq
Really appreciate your words. Thank you.
Truly wonderful words Dave - as always.
Anna :o]
Excellent write..I especially like "Illustrious men will turn to stone
who never left a stone unturned..."...
Every line delicious ... especially the last!
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