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Thursday, 8 April 2010

Haiku #108


Off they'll go to vote -
the twenty five million
whose votes will not count.

9 comments:

Art Durkee said...

Hi, Dave—

I've been watching your progression with this series of haiku. Some of them are really good. Are you choosing to stick to a specific set of rules in making them? (I.e. syllable count or format) It's interesting to break out of that sometimes.

Are you aware of the distinction between haiku and senryu? Many of these poems of yours are more senryu than haiku, strictly speaking. The light touches of irony about human foibles, for example, are characteristic of the latter; the distinction is about typical content, rather than strictly about the form. Many of which I think you've caught very well, like in #106, which made me laugh.

Anyway, best wishes. You're getting some good results, I think.

Ronda Laveen said...

It's usually that way isn't. Millions of people have the right and won't. Others can't and do.

We so often take things for granted.

Kass said...

Skeptical cynics
are right even when they're wrong.
Let's vote anyway.

Ronda, your response could also be haiku:

It's usually that way -
Millions have the right and won't.
Others can't and do.

Very catchy.

Elisabeth said...

Here in Australia, we must, vote that is, we're obliged by law. I prefer it this way. At least every vote counts unless a person actually actively annuls it into a donkey vote.

It's paradoxical of course. Those who couldn't care less might be required to vote but not to think about how they vote. Though there's more chance they might think just a tad if they're obliged to do so.

bard said...

You've managed to pack a lot of power into those three short lines...

Gwei Mui said...

How true, I think that the UK should adopt the Australian view, as Elisabeth has pointed it by law all Autralian citizens have to vote. We've proved that thus far leaving it down to the indivdual doesn't work. I have a real problem with people who moan about the state of the country but who haven't bothered to cast their vote.

Dave King said...

Art
Thanks for the comments. When I began this series the idea was to put items of news in Haiku form. I understood the word Haiku to be in inverted commas and did not set out to be strictly 5-7-5. My thoughts then can be found here. However the stricter syllable discipline has proved more popular and so I have tended to stick with it. I have popped in the occasional Tanka, but no, I was not aware of the distinction between Haiku and senryu, so my thanks for calling my attention to it. Also for your best wishes.

Dave King said...

Ronda
Proportional representation .

Kass
Lets all misbehave and have a rave at this one - shall we brave it out?

Elisabeth
Do you have P.R.? We don't. Your vote doesn't count if you live in an earthquake-proof constituency with n o chance of dislodging the party that's been there these last 100 years or more.

Bard
Thanks for those kind words.

Gwei
There's a case to be made, but I'm not sure I'm convinced. European countries with P.R. tend to have unstable governments.

Dan Gurney said...

I'm loving your haiku, especially how you observe the syllabic form of it. I'm glad, too, to learn of the distinction between Haiku and senryu...thanks to you and to Art.