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Wednesday 13 July 2011

Triple Haiku and Tanka

blackbird and robin
feeding beneath the rose bush -
tit-bits on the path

small birds above them
chomping among dead petals
for hidden insects

rose petals falling
confetti on the bride and groom
as they fly away

Like choir boys of old
scratching their names on the pew,
donors to the roof
can see their particulars
as part of the church fabric


Rachna Chhabria said...

Hi Dave.. wonderful poem. "rose petals falling
confetti on the bride and groom
as they fly away"
Love that line.

Hope you won't mind if I read it to my students during poetry session.

Lolamouse said...

Overachiever! Seriously, this is beautiful. I love the images you've created as you move higher and higher. Lovely.

Rose said...

Beautiful triple haiku and excellent tanka!

Louise said...

Agree....both brilliant..as I have learned to expect!!!! You don't disappoint.

Windsmoke. said...

Fantastic triple Haiku i especially like the first one very vivid imagery :-).

SG said...

Brilliant visual imagery!

Dave King said...

Hi and a warm welcome to you. Many thanks for the kind comments. As to reading it to your students, I take it as a great compliment. An extra thank you!

No one has ever called me that before. Thank you for such a generous response.

Thank you. Much appreciated.

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That's really good of you. Glad you liked it.

Thanks once more: a really useful comment.

Hi Thanks for visiting and for the comment. Good to know whose been and what they thought.

jabblog said...

I like both the triple haiku and the tanka. I particularly like
'small birds above them
chomping among dead petals' - 'chomping' gave it depth and realism though it's not a word I would generally associate with birds.