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Monday, 21 November 2011
The image is this week's Magpie Tales prompt.
in their world
but the other.
At each point
but two pairs of lips.
His on hers.
Hers on his.
are reduced to this
the touch and press
Only the lips
that their brains
are lost in space
are unread ideograms
of crumpled sheet.
Sensation is a match
flaring at the touch
to strong emotion
dying down again.
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nice dave....i like the comparison of them to matches...burning at the tip where they come together it fits the rather interesting picture...
As always a perfect take on the picture.
Wow. Great poem for that prompt.
It fits in symmetry like you say
lovely thank you x
awesome! i love it very much! "nothing exists but the other."
have a great week ahead sir!
You brought the picture to life. I especially liked your last stanza!
Everything else stripped away and just them on display, wonderful verse.
Like this ... (I'm rethinking everything I thought I learned in that geometry class years ago.)
A mystical kiss. Excellent.
Ahhhhhh, wonderful lip service!!! ;-D
Very nice, Dave. :-)
You words give this photo an added dimension while staying true to the essence of it.
"Their bodies pure geometry"....this is pure brilliance Dave....an amazing poem!
Very enjoyable right from the first kiss to the last :-).
Strong beautiful images...I love the pure geometry, match flaring, and pair of lips.
Lovely words ~
Physical and mental phenomenon melt into one moment...
hat is beautiful...the unity of mindfulness, mirroring meshed souls and intellects!
I like the way you pulled other reference points in making this a map of the senses
of crumpled sheet."
luscious poem Mr King
not sure about 'delineate', somehow it feels awkward?
many lovely lines and truth!
They're young explorers. In love. Getting lost. Then finding their way back again. Hmm...
Unread ideograms... nice...
Thanks for saying that - the sort of thing it's helpful to know.
Thanks jane. Much obliged for the comment.
Thanks for those encouraging words.
Thanks izzy. Good to know these things.
No, thank you. And welcome to the blog.
Hi, Good to have your company and comment. Thank you for both.
Thanks, it was something of an afterthought, but I did think it fitted.
Many thanks for a useful piece of feedback.
My geometry classes were very drear. I liked them at the time, but non-Euclidian geometry is much more sexy!
Thanks - are ther any other kinds. Those we give to aunts and big-wigs, I suppose.
Brilliant response. Thanks muchly!
Good to know you like it. Thanks for saying.
Welcome to my blog and thank you for these kind words.
A warm welcome to you and sincere thanks for your kind remarks.
Which is at it should be, of course! Seriously, though. Great comment, duly appreciated. Thanks.
Good to have your views. Thank you so much for them. They are much appreciated.
Lovely way of putting it. Thank you.
Hi! A warm welcome to my blog and many thanks for stopping by to comment. Your generous comment is very much valued.
Hi! Good to have you visitng and commenting. Thank you for doing so. All views are much sought after.
Thank you so much for the comment.
Interesting point. It actually wasn't my first choice. I shall have another think! Thank you v much for raising it.
Thank you. Appreciated.
Yup, I'd settle for that! It's good to have you visiting. Thank you for commenting.
Hi Cad! Welcome and much thanks.
Really well done.
Beautiful rendering of a kiss.
pure geometry, pure chemistry, pure kiss are part of sincerity.
Hi, Welcome! Thank you for your visit and for leaving a comment. Both much appreciated.
Thank you for saying so.
Thank you for your comment.
A kiss nicely depicted and in perfect harmony with the pic. Thanks for your nice comment on my blog.
a poem within a poem --
the touch and press
Really nice! Loved it.
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